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The Golden Touch (Ottava Rima) (Classic Poetic Forms WS)
Come forth to hear a tale you heard nonesuch
about the touch of greed Midas, the king.
He had the wealth, the gold and money-much,
not content though he'd almost everything.
That's when Dionysus gifted him a touch
that turns anything to gold, even spring,
but when he gave his daughter an embrace,
just then he knew that gift was but a curse.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
alidzain
Fri, 2016-01-29 14:42
Salam, Rula
"that turns anything to gold, even spring,"
Sis, can you do the parsing for this? I'm not sure if "anything" helps with the meter because the
'a" sound is stressed.
Alid
Rula
Fri, 2016-01-29 15:04
salam khalid
I am not happy with it either . I might find an alternative. But till then I think I it's a slight violation of the meter that I can go with.
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