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Girl from Half Moon Bay

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Thu, 2024-02-01 09:50

Crazy was never boring.
But it couldn’t be built to last.

Her love had sharp edges.
The cutting kind with no concern.

As if she could mend everything
with all of my pieces.

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Free verse
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More from my dating times...
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Editing - polished draft
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Not Explicit Content

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Candlewitch

Thu, 2024-02-01 10:23

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must have been either a sorcerer or a seamstress, maybe both!

*hugs, Cat

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Michael Anthony

Thu, 2024-02-01 10:39

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Hahaha - love that Cat! Maybe a little of both.

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Geezer

Thu, 2024-02-01 12:29

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that kind. The ones who don't care about where their affections come from or go to, each one has to be better than the last.
Anyhow, nice job. ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony

Thu, 2024-02-01 13:50

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Thanks Geez! I like your comment about coming from or goiing to - very apropos here. Might use that as a prompt somewhere - cheers!

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Michael Anthony

Fri, 2024-02-02 09:31

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Thank you Mark! Your comments seem to have the kernel of a poem I look forward to reading my friend!

Hope the new year is off to a good start for you and yours.

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Michael Anthony

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Lavender

Fri, 2024-02-02 10:35

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Hello, Michael,
Love the title. Right away it gives me the feeling of a very significant place and time period, much like the movie title, "Summer of '42." Nice final line that sums it all up.
Thank you,
L
(Looked up Half Moon Bay - beautiful! I hope you also have fond memories there, too!)

Ruby Lord

Sat, 2024-02-03 06:43

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For a short poem, you've hit all the spots. Great job, I really enjoyed this. Ruby :) xx

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