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I'm back. I'll pack my pains and ails,
my tears and wails
I'll pack them all,
with aches that bawl.

I'm back with suns, I'm back with moons,
with stars won't swoon.
I'm back with smiles
that last for whiles.

I'm back. No doubts, no cries, or tears
Nor ounce of fears
but trust and care
with much to share.

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The tempo wasn't maintained in the last verse?

Suggestions? I will be grateful

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Is my suggestion for stanza 2

but then this is a strict iamb form
http://www.poetrydances.com/minute.php

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I looked at the example you provided and I think those changes no or nor and that still maintain iambic form. Let me know if not?

I was refering to the changes in the 2nd stanza
As for the third, which do you think works better

No doubts, no cries, no tears
nor ounce of fears

Or
No doubts, no cries, or tears
no ounce of fears

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For the work. I am obviously the "no" sort and you the "nor"!

I was seeking which grammatically is more appropriate

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"No doubts, cries, tears or ounce of fears."

Not very poetic is it?
Let me be perfectly scholarly here...
This is whimsy. It is a technical poetic form characterized by... well, mostly a lot of character. Humor, that thing that perplexes us Vulcans so.
Therefore, under this rule structure that isn't exactly a rule structure, my suggestion is to go with the repetition.
Know this also... it is grammatically incorrect to use "nor" after a use of "no" or any other negative. We must use "or". So being that it is grammatically incorrect and this is whimsy... go for "nor".
Why didn't I get a press release or something about this poem before it was released?

I like it very much and is demonstrating a side of you I haven't seen recently.

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A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley

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