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Triangular, rectangular,
the horizon full of houses,
the trees a minority like toys placed in between,
out of place in man-made rows
like flowers in parks, arranged;
society is military,
ordered, tidied, clipped and swept,
while nature watches from the woods and hills,
she wonders as to why she feels made alien,
when it's she who is the keeper of our souls.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Last few words: 
Just a routine visit to the Dr. nothing special, just looking.
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Only thing i'd change is the second last line, ( she wonders as to why she feels alien ), apart from that superb. Love Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Maybe you're right Roscoe,
maybe I shall take it away, it overstates perhaps.

It was a little like the child in the same waiting room, playing with his bricks, as they do while waiting to see the Dr. me playing with the view outside the window, it's a lovely view, with a lot of tree peeping over the houses, and the quiet hills in the background, covered in firs and birches, all just out with new green leaves.

Love Ann

"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.

author comment

would be to lose the last line and make the last line read as: As nature watches [untamed] from the woods and hills. Giving the impression of nature being unruly and not staid, like man wants everything to be. ~
Your knight, Sir Gee

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A beautiful concept of nature watching our military rows of plants and trees, you ought to see my front garden it is a jungle, though the plants are from a few other countries.
The acer (Japan) hibiscus (Pacific area) and a bottle brush tree I grew from seed that I gathered in Africa, I gave my two indoor trees away to the local school the other week (I miss them) A Baobab and a Bottle tree, I am very naughty I gather seed from all the places I go to try and grow them.
I have some Lukino trees just started to grow at the moment (A type of Mimosa) they are wonderful for the children, as each day a dusk they close their leaves up, as if they are saying their prayers..They are grown in Africa as they are one of the fastest growing trees, so that they can be harvested every six months for firewood, and the leaves are good for fodder what more can they want..
Anyway back to the Surgery Window, what are you doing in there, I hope you are well and that elusive man that is with you, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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