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To a Flame

Submitted by Michael Anthony on Sun, 2024-02-11 14:04

It's like, what if moths
aren’t attracted to light,
as they flutter chaotically
around the source.

What if the thing we think
is pulling them closer confuses
which way they should go.

Love has been like that.

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How does this theme appeal to you?

How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Last few words:

Inspired by an article about an interesting new theory about why insects seem attracted by light sources at night.

Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Obadiah Grey

Mon, 2024-02-12 13:07

brevity in poetry at its best

Brevity in poetry at its best.
Bravo, and well done!

Obi.

Michael Anthony

Wed, 2024-02-14 12:53

Thank you Obi! Very kind.

Best

Michael Anthony

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Lavender

Tue, 2024-02-13 19:32

To a Flame

Hello, Michael,
Another great write. Perfect final line.
L

Michael Anthony

Wed, 2024-02-14 12:54

Thanks for stopping by L!

Thanks for stopping by L! Glad you liked this one.

Best

Michael Anthony

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Candlewitch

Wed, 2024-02-14 12:56

;)

the last line makes it sing!

*always, Cat

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Michael Anthony

Wed, 2024-02-14 18:45

Better the words than my

Better the words than my singing - LOL! Thank you Cat!

Best

Michael Anthony

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To a Flame