Hi Lavender, I think you can use the ly word with an ing ending but I sense your doubt, possibly because you've drawn my attention to it?
If I can suggest, the following:
Because you have said last breath at the beginning of the final stanza perhaps instead of saying letting go, using "exhales" allows for the reader to assume the message within their own understanding? Or using release as this is what I understood it to mean but I'm probably wrong.
Lovely poem with my attention drawn to the scene by your use of alliteration, personification and metaphor. It was a fantastic read.
Ruby :) xx

..the last stanza and last line reads fine to me. Try reading it without using ing or ly. Your vocabulary is so nice, I often wonder how your work would read in sonnet form....often wish, too.

Thomas

My favorite time of year! I love the way you depicted the leaves and color...reminded me of shiny ornaments except hanging from the trees outside instead of a Christmas tree. I love how you reflect and appreciate all of the little things in nature. Well done.

I never even noticed the awkward thing about your last line.
Wait; what awkward thing? I think you might have been thrown by the way that it looked, rather than the sound of it.
I love the way the colors amble, march and splash across the scene. A thorough description of colors brings a view from the brain.
Great scenery! ~ Geez.
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