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Dear John
Dear John,
May you rot in hell
Buried with your lies
I'm the dirty secret
You wouldn't tell
Dear, dear John,
Karma's a bitch
A far bigger one than I
Such a shame
If your body wound up in a ditch
Dear John,
I hope this letter finds you well
You selfish, sadistic, abusive prick
Not one more tear will fall
May you rot in hell
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neopoet
Sat, 2023-05-13 05:00
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RoseBlack
Sat, 2023-05-13 05:14
Ahahhaa
AI couldn't find anything good to say about this...that's ok...there is absolutely nothing good about the person it was written about!
~RoseBlack~
author commentGeezer
Sat, 2023-05-13 12:28
One of the best...
Dear John letters I've ever heard!
I am amazed that the AI could find nothing at all to say about this one. It should at least provide a critique on the style, the form and use of language. I felt that this one is a pretty good example of what a real "Dear John" letter should be. Nice work! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack
Sat, 2023-05-13 13:01
Thank you, Gee
There was some real, raw emotions in that Dear John letter, no words minced. I was very surprised AI had nothing constructive to say about it. Glad you enjoyed!
~RoseBlack~
author commentRuby Lord
Sat, 2023-05-13 14:26
Loved it, the venom and
Loved it, the venom and malice layered in equal measures. This is the sort of poetry I love, the unexpected. Well done, Ruby :)
Give and grow - let's raise our verses together. I'm happy to comment on your work and appreciate a comment on mine.
RoseBlack
Sat, 2023-05-13 21:32
Hi Ruby
Thank you for your feedback! I am glad you enjoyed!
~RoseBlack~
author commentSeren
Sat, 2023-05-13 23:16
Dear Carrie
This is a scorching Dear John letter. I feel the flames and the anger of someone betrayed.
I'm super surprised the AI had nought to say as well. It's got heat maybe you melted his circuits lol
Good luck in the competition
Much love..
Jayne
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
RoseBlack
Sun, 2023-05-14 05:34
Hi Jayne
This was certainly raw and emotion filled. I guess AI doesnt like writing outside the box. I'm glad you liked it and glad to see you are back.
~RoseBlack~
author commentClentin
Tue, 2023-05-16 13:44
I find this poem really
I find this poem really expresses anguish, betrayal and sincere hatred!
It effectively portrays real emotions and feelings.
RoseBlack
Tue, 2023-05-16 19:47
Thank you
This was a very honest write. Glad you enjoyed
~RoseBlack~
author commentLeslie
Sun, 2023-05-21 17:19
This one ripped me up ...
kinda made me sick! I'm sorry you went through what you did to feel this much anger ,
frustration and sorrow.
The power of our language can and will change the world.
Successively until our languages become one!
RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-05-24 21:14
I am not
A horrible vindictive person but this individual certainly has put me through it and brought out the harsher side of me. Writing is my only outlet.
~RoseBlack~
author commentRoseBlack
Tue, 2023-05-30 22:51
Thank you
Thank you
~RoseBlack~
author commentCandlewitch
Wed, 2023-05-31 09:25
dear Carrie,
congratulation on your emancipation! it is cleansing to write like this. the guy is a tyrant and user!
* love, Cat & eddy
* castration would be a fitting solution!
ever, eddy
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
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RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-05-31 21:43
Oh Eddy
I like how you think. Dear John certainly got more then he bargained for...karma really is a bitch...
~RoseBlack~
author commentUnca Fez
Wed, 2023-05-31 21:53
A Death Day Wish
If I believed in reincarnation, I would hope that he would be re-born as a girl into a family of child molesters, but that would be asking too much. Maybe just a girl with lesbian tendancies into a Seventh Day Adventist family. In any case, I really enjoyed reading this.
Thanx,
Steve
RoseBlack
Thu, 2023-06-01 10:49
Thanks Steve
It was definitely a very emotionally charged piece. There were a couple people I had in mind and this is how it played out. Glad you enjoyed.
~RoseBlack~
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