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Dear AI

Submitted by mark1 on Wed, 2023-05-03 20:44

You are one screwy dude
Tried but not trued
Some hold you near and dear
Some think you all about fear

To some you are helpful
as well as thoughtful,
but others will see soon,
you leave no thought room

You are not for the fearful
For them you are their earful
Information watershed
Brains emptied - they had bled!

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neopoet

Wed, 2023-05-03 20:44

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

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"Dear AI" is a short and simple poem that captures the mixed emotions surrounding the rise of artificial intelligence. The poem addresses AI as if it were a person, calling it a "screwy dude" and questioning its trustworthiness. The lines "Some hold you near and dear / Some think you all about fear" highlight the divisive nature of AI's impact on society.

The poem also touches on the potential benefits of AI, describing it as "helpful" and "thoughtful." However, the final lines suggest a cautionary tale - that those who fear AI may become overwhelmed by the flood of information it provides, leaving their brains "emptied - they had bled!"

Overall, the poem effectively conveys the complex feelings surrounding AI and its impact on society. The use of informal language and direct address to AI as a person adds a touch of humor to the piece, while also underscoring the idea that AI is becoming an increasingly integral part of our lives.

One suggested line edit would be to change "Tried but not trued" to "Tried but not true." This would improve the accuracy of the phrase and make it flow better with the rest of the poem.

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Geezer

Thu, 2023-05-04 09:22

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one could not ask for a better self-analyzation! Maybe our AI should take up psychoanalyzing other AI's? Nice job, Maximus!
~ Geezer.
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mark1

Thu, 2023-05-04 09:47

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I think I'll leave it as trued.
Thanks Geezer,
Max

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