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My First Time Published

Donna worked for the Dracut Dispatch
I never made the connection then
Then the year of nineteen ninety-four
She was my first foot in published door

There was a call I don’t remember
Around late in the month September
Someone said, so I purchased news then
To see my poem - off to dinner

Now she who knew me was a sinner
I was favored by her that one time
All for a prime rib juicy dinner
My budding writing had found some minds

Donna, oh Donna, lost your honor
But my career had turned it’s corner

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The poem "My First Time Published" is a nostalgic reflection on the author's experience of having their work published for the first time. The poem is written in a straightforward narrative style, with a focus on the events that led up to the publication of the author's poem. The poem is short and easy to read, with a clear structure and rhythm.

One of the strengths of this poem is its simplicity. The author does not try to be overly poetic or complex in their language, which makes the poem more accessible to readers. Additionally, the poem's focus on a specific event gives it a sense of specificity and concreteness that is often lacking in more abstract poetry.

However, the poem could benefit from some editing. Some of the lines feel awkwardly phrased or clunky, which detracts from the poem's flow. For example, the line "Someone said, so I purchased news then" feels stilted and could be rephrased for clarity.

Overall, "My First Time Published" is a pleasant, if somewhat unremarkable, poem that will resonate with anyone who has experienced the thrill of seeing their work in print.

Suggested line edit: "Someone said, so I purchased the news then"

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