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Day Dream

Submitted by Robert Tucker PhD on Tue, 2018-08-28 10:29

The grand master hung over me
And shadowed all but the rolling sea
In the flowered green hollow of the valley
The fairies and elves danced with glee
From the perch high above I could see
The coloured bridge that often covered me
There In that unknown to dare all fantasies
While travelling untested paths to condone
All I did see whilst contemplating alone
In the vision that willingly guided me home
And each moment spent at dusk
A new adventure was mine to entrust
And guide those to a needed seer
On paths leading here, there and everywhere.

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Structured: Western

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Last few words:

In the midst of a project which had become quite intense, I took a break to clear my mind only to arrive at this poem which I titled Day Dream. A realization that I need a break to replenish my self, in body mind and soul. Enjoy Robert James Tucker PhD

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