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Conflicted Cinquain

Ego
Blatant monster
Destroys my inner peace
Leaves me anxious and full of fear
Villain

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Structured: Eastern
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Wanted to try a structured poem - found this Cinquain form within the depths of the poetry underground. Five lines progressing to 2 syllables, 4 syllables, 6 syllables, 8 syllables, and 2 syllables. First line is a noun, second line is a description of the noun, third line is the action of the noun, fourth line is the effect or feeling from the action, and the fifth and final line is a synonym for the initial noun. Loads of fun, and I hope it is properly written! Thank you!
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Your title says it all, your syllables are correct so well done, I think you have packed in the power here with the words you have chosen. Ego's indeed can be villains.
An excellent cinquain that before today I knew nothing about.
Have a wonderful day in your new home.

Thank you...Teddy

It is fun to try something new. I think most of the time our egos play the biggest role in miscommunication. Thank you for the well wishes!
L

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my ego fully deflated, with the reading of this rare form, from you. Very nice and well done. ~ Geez.
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Ha ha! I can only speak for my own ego - constant work in progress! Thank you for reading!
L

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