Totally agree with the sentiment of this piece.
I very much like the internal rhymes through out.
Enjoyable read.

I appreciate the poem.

Particularly , I like:
Their overwhelming
oceans of
numbing neurotic
notions into
one vital
viewpoint of
vulnerability.
Where they
rationally rush
towards their
ruptured
realizations

In the portion of the stanza above, i suggest to place a couple of words in a slightly different place. Not eliminate any words, just place them where they seem to go in a rythym.

numbing neurotic
notions into
one vital
viewpoint of
>>>>>>>>>>>>>Becoming
“Numbing, neutrotic, notions
into one vital viewpoint<<<<<<<

I think the rest of the piece is really nice!

This is just my nickel’s worth.

"...rationally rush..." So much in those two words which shouldn't make sense together, yet somehow they do. This is how many of us are, until we see the light. Thoughtful final line.
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this is about one of my favorites from you! It is smooth and tells the story without a bump in the road. I am always amazed at your work! Kudos! ~ Geez.
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