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The Ballad Of The Pasta Dish

Around the hour of three or four
on a Sunday afternoon
I scampered through the kitchen door
grabbed the ice cream and a spoon

kicked up my feet to sit a spell
turned on the football game
booed and hissed a cursive yell
as the home crowd did the same

the ball was fumbled then recovered
by the bulky brute linebacker
who grabbed the ball and tightly hovered
like a mad cowhide-attacker

I'd had enough and couldn't bear
another clumsy play
found my spoon beneath my chair
threw the ice cream box away

brought out the dish from the calling fridge
my mood now cross and petty
smelled the sauce that formed a creamy ridge
over piles of thin spaghetti

and then it came, an announcer's scream
a thunderous, gargantuan roar
"Touchdown!" rally for our home team
as the pasta dish hit the floor
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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
No football players were injured while creating this poem. That poor cow, however...
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

An enjoyable and amusing ballad indeed.
It speaks to millions who are fascinated by the world cup these days.
Ballads, usually written in tetrameter or trimeter are meant to be sung and hence require a strict meter.
I remember writing one or two of them and I know how hard to keep the reader attracted to the story. That was my hardest part, but you as always make it look like an effortless job.
V. much enjoyed reading your ballad dear.
Thank you for sharing.

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L

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You are so clever. Thank you!
Lav

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I love the rhyme and rhythm! Your meter is very good, and I enjoyed this one immensely! ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Stretching out a bit and trying something very different from the usual form, theme, tone...everything I use most of the time.
Thank you for reading!
L

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I have severed my emotional attachment to the NFL. It was an addiction. I prefer to read poems at this stage in life. This is basically flawless.

Tim

Thank you so much for reading! Always appreciated.
L

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