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A Baby's Prayer

Bless the mothers and praise their charms
I found "me" in mama's arms
Always safe, always sound
Always honoured with that bound
Graceful, delicate, almost silk
Bless all mothers of mama's ilk

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Your poem had me in tears. so soft and tender I still miss my mom and more than likely always will
thank you for this lovely poem

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

What more would a poet wish. Bless you and your mother
Thank you for reading

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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It rolled off my tongue "stunning" I just would like to ask how you have used the word ilk because in some references it is a negative word, I don't know if you knew. Will be back to find out for my interest.

Thank you...Teddy

Thank you for your kind visit.
I never knew that ilk has a negative meaning. My dictionary doesn't mention any negative use

Here what I find:

ilk 1
— noun

family, class, or kind:
he and all his ilk.
— adjective

same .
— Idioms

of that ilk ,
(in Scotland) of the same family name or place:
Ross of that ilk, i.e., Ross of Ross.
of the same class or kind.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
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So I have learnt something new
Just had to ask Beautiful poem as ever

Thank you...Teddy

being a man of few words, let me sum it all up in one line: Your poetry lines are silky-smooth and cute as a baby's butt. Much liked. Jerry

Thank you. You've said pretty much in this one line Jerry.
Highly appreciate your kind visit.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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***Did you read my poem
MOM'S SMILES

''''''''''Bless the mothers and praise their charms
I found "me" in mama's arms(((WHY ME IN INVERTED COMMAS Rula???)
Always safe, always sound
Always honoured with that bound
Graceful, delicate, almost silk
Bless all mothers of mama's ilk

I thought "myself" is grammatically more correct, but as the speaker is a baby, hence comes the quotation marks.
Thanks for the kind visit.

❤❤❤❤❤❤

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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