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AUTUMN'S CUSP

Mid October a cool day
with a northern cooling breeze.
All hints of summer gone away.
The few green leaves are just a tease.

Tomorrows will bring the first frost
so this day finds me 'neath the trees
absorbing warmth before its lost
and limbering up titanium knees.

For I'm not what I once was.
Time has seen that I am not,
So I sit on a stump to take a pause
and breathe autumn's scent which I'd forgot.

Then turn my face up to the sky
as cool front winds begin to blow.
I watch the clouds as they race by.
They leave like friends I used to know.

My eyes water from sun's glare
so I drop my head down to my chest
letting my chin settle there
while I count the ways that I am blessed.

I'm blessed with our cabin in the trees
I'm blessed with seeing one more fall.
I'm blessed with grandchildren to tease.
I'm blessed with being here at all.

I watch a squirrel climb to its nest
for now the sun is getting low
so ere' it reaches ridge's crest
I arise and then turn and go.

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
perhaps this will break the writer's block I've been enduring..........
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first line ought to also be bless...ED...
May re-look
ere the sun goes down

We both are aging since those gone off morns
when perhaps we were both born
in time's expansive greener than now lawns
rgds
Stan

It sure is nice to have friends who spot my myriad typos. Hope you are doing well

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Hi, Stan,
It is lovely to just sit and pause. So peaceful, I hate to walk away from it.
Thank you,
Lavender

And the older this old dude gets the more I appreciate being able to do it

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Awesome. Don’t touch it. I love it.

Tim

Not sure its awesome but thanks for saying so lol

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I have missed walking with you & listening and watching your seasons pass by, I offer no edit to perfection but this.

and breathe autumn's scent which I'd forgot.

I'd get rid of the *and* turn breathe into *breathing*

just a suggestion as always they are just that.

love always to you and yours Sis xxx

"My head is broken but unbowed" - William Ernest Henley

You know, I had considered this when I scribbled this one out. I'll give it some thought then make up my mind tomorrow

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I agree with Seren on everything. I hope you are well and warm...

*hugs, Cat

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