Seren

Jul 07, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

I Love You

Through the hardest times we face
and the laughter and the tears
Through the sadness when we lose one
with the pain of all our fears

I Love you

Through the blazing flames of fire
and the shifting of the ash
Through the power of the waves
with the movement of the sand

I Love you

Through the howling of the wind
and the wisp of gentle breeze
Through the racing hands of time
with the slowing of our years

I Love you

with all the mystery, a life can construe
I’ll forever be in love with you ….

— Seren, Jul 07, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

jetz

15 years 11 months ago

Hi Seren, You are a woman

Hi Seren, You are a woman of many writing styles. I like this. Crisp, clear, and to the point. Plus, I'm a sucker for " I love you" poems. Nicely done indeed. Sue

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

This was the only style of poetry I wrote at one stage but then the world became my oyster here at Neopoet where I live there isnt a great library we have a library LOL but its not as extensive as the city ones this was one of the first poems I submitted here decided to finish it off with one last edit I cant see anymore I can do with it and to be honest I want to keep it raw as a reminder of how far ive actually come in words thanks for the kind comment its appreciated love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Candlewitch

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Jayne

The poem is lovely. My favorite lines: I Love you Through the blazing flames of fire and the shifting of the ash Through the power of the waves with the movement of the sand Love, Cat

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Cat

I dont know if you read the first version of this one but it was one of the first poems I submitted to Neopoet ... and I decided to give it one last dress very happy you like it its simple but that is the poet I was at the time love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

xena465

15 years 11 months ago

WoW!

I think this is one of the best ways of saying "I love you", that I've ever read. Wonderful JayCeee. Xena Quote: Science is what you know; philosophy is what you don't know. - Bertrand Russell

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Xena

Very Happy you like this one its a very old one ive done a last edit I think this is going to be the last thanks for the lovely comment much appreciated JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

scribbler

15 years 11 months ago

love

Shhhh!your better half might hear LOL!As long as love is constant,what else matters.Of course you said it much better.........scribbler

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Stan

LMAO ... funny man you always make me smile lol ... love is a constant and its constantly got to be worked on to keep it healthy love and hugs jayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

shirley harrison

15 years 11 months ago

"the love is shown deeply"

Dear Seren, beautiful love poem deep and very strong! much love shirley harrison

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Shirley

this is an old poem ... I appreciate the read love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

judyanne

15 years 11 months ago

i don't normally like these

a little too greeting card style for me but you somehow get away with it lovely write jc love and hugs judd xxxx http://www.strategicpublishinggroup.com/title/TwentyMyPrettyPonies.html

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Judd

I dont know if I get away with it lmao ... but its an old poem about ten years old it was one of the first poem I posted here its a lot different to what it started out like I appreciate the read and the comment love and big hugs JayCee x x x oi oi oi (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

greeneyes

15 years 11 months ago

Beautiful

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

thank you love JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Electric Blue

15 years 11 months ago

I love you

Jay-cee I tried to post this yesterday but it would not let me post so trying again today So beautiful Just so heartfelt melts me away I too have a love with such deep wishes in my soul love and hugs always maggie xxx still not got your pix yet

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Magz

I will email them from my neopoet account and make sure you get them I appreciate the read and I hope for you my friend that all you dream of comes true for you ... love and hugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

panaella

15 years 11 months ago

your style has evolved...

But even with this, it's crafted...you are so talented and a great inspiration to me personally. Much love, Ells xxxx

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Ell's

Your much too kind but Ill take it anyway lol thanks for the visit and the read love and big hugs JayCee good to see you round hun hugs x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

seabhac

15 years 11 months ago

Hi Jayne

Just dipped in for a quick visit and found this ...strange how it is an old style and yet I see some of the 'new' poet in its style also. There was one line that stuck a bit with me because of its rhyming form Through the blazing flames of fire and the shifting of the ash Through the power of the waves with the movement of the sand I want this to rhyme and it doesn't and although I see the connection between ash and sand ...the words struggle for me damn it woman you've fought it for months and here I am saying ....I want it to rhyme!!!!!the world has gone crazy my friend. O.k. tell me why have you written it this way, help me understand it better. Seabhac

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

I left the mistake of the poet in ;)

it was my first mistake and I leave it there to remind me how far ive come, I want to show my early works and their rawness ... maybe so that others can learn from my mistakes I am going to have a think on those two lines I think I might have a fix that will please you will have a look in the daylight when I am not brain dead lol love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

R.M.Shanmugam

15 years 11 months ago

bold and straight in approch

bold and straight in approch and in adress. every reader will like it. shan

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dear Shan

Thank you very much love and hugs JayCee (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

lou

15 years 11 months ago

Jayne

Faultless poetry, stunningly beautiful. lou xx

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Dearest Lou

thank you so much I am glad you liked it love and hugs JayCee catch you later today :) love love (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

I see...

the difference in your writes, much as you see the difference in mine. I also see the sameness of your heart on its' journey. Excellent! ~ Love and hig bugs,~ Gee

Seren

15 years 11 months ago

Oh myyyyy Geeeee its early

Oh myyyyy Geeeee its early early morning your comment was the last one I was going to answer and your comments inspired me ... so lol I cant go to sleep till I get a rough draft down or im screwed and will forget it thank you for the comment and the inspiration lol love and higgliest bugs JayCee x x x (Quote~~"It is by universal misunderstanding that all agree. For if, by ill luck, people understood each other, they would never agree. "--Charles Baudelaire)

Geezer

15 years 11 months ago

Yaaaawwnn...

Sorry, didn't mean to get you all fired up, while you should be lying down. If I remembered all the things I wanted to say, and/or write, I would never sleep. i do know what you mean though. I think that one of the hardest things about writing, is the lines and stories that get lost, when we screw up and don't get them down right away. Higgest bugs and lotta love, ~ Gee