Seren

May 06, 2010 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

the parted lips of Whim

I want to fall into
the bed of your dreams
as phantom fingers
of smoke reveal

I am bare
with the touch
of your sight,
part the veils
let the calligraphy
of your tongue
write a thousand
love notes
and leave them
beneath my skin

as the pulsing
heat of you
brushed my thighs
I let the force
of my release,
find me
untethered

your mouth
parted my lips
and again,

this is a bed of dreams
I am your illusion,
my words whim and
in a moments crest
I take a breath

— Seren, May 06, 2010

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Jayne

H O T!!! Only you can say it so majestically. I love your word choices and I think your mind must be a river of richness. You knock me out with your fluidity. Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

what can I say to such a brilliant comment except thank you ... you've been an awesome friend and always supportive (((((hugs))))) and You where one of the people that helped me grow as a poet, you helped me see my friend love and thanks JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

themoonman

16 years 1 month ago

Jayne...

When the Whim is right... it just is. great title and the poem was smokin. Richard

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Rochard

Your so right big smiles I am so happy you liked the title, it just came from nowhere when I finished it just popped into my head ... sometimes they just find you ya know ??? and this ones special cause even I like it lol thanks for the visit I am always very happy when you like my poems love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Kailashana

16 years 1 month ago

Such a poem! Sizzling with

Such a poem! Sizzling with insight, deeply ingrained! ~ ~ ~ "The plain man is familiar with blindness and deafness, and knows from his everyday experience that the look of things is influenced by his senses, but it never occurs to him to regard the whole world as a creation of his senses." ~ Ernst Mach

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Mum it was you that helped

Mum it was you that helped me find the way to this one ... all your talk of skin, Jesus woman it could turn a monk lmao ... love you and thank you for the inspiration ... I am going to have to call one of my muses Kailashana I think for you are always inspiring me smiles love you JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

kicking arse "again"

Seren you are a magnificent poetess,Brava Amica Mia, ci vediamo presto a firenze! shirley harrison

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

LOL Shirley

Been a long long time since I had to learn italian but here goes for a reply ringraziarla il mio amico...Firenze qui sono venuto tell me if I said it wrong i need practice lol glad you liked my poem its one I actually like lol and thats rare love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

my boss has given up !

JC, in my local town we have a few clowns and one only speaks to me in italian, with an english accent! Every body laughs,like Julia Child when she spoke french! you have written, to a guy , "florence here i have been" Amica as i am a girl but very good as you would have been understood Brava,Cara! shirley harrison

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

PMSL

Bloody long time since I have spoken or written Italian lol I learnt when I was singing Opera and I loved the language so much it was an extra class I took ... I am so out of practice amica lol ... O is a boy and I instantly wrote O cause the only person I ever spoke italian to on a regular basis was over fifteen yrs ago and was a guy ... I sometimes get pissed off and tell the hubby off in Italian and he knows I am swearing at him but has no clue lmao ;) love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Orphani

16 years 1 month ago

I like the direction of your

I like the direction of your poetic voice. There is a confidence and ease that flows with your soft spoken power to use more sensitive and expressive metaphors to set the tone and feeling of the poem. You get it and use it to good effect eroticly I am bare with the touch of your sight, part the veils let the calligraphy of your tongue write a thousand love notes and leave them beneath my skin

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dearest B

You and Annamom started this one its all your fault ! but I am very happy you liked it hun it was one of those, that just came from nowhere and found a home on my page ... thanks for the comment its appreciated love and big hugs JC x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

shirley harrison

16 years 1 month ago

my picture is to you!

here is the magical Duomo for you seren! shirley harrison

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Awwww Shirley thank you …

Awwww Shirley thank you ... I will send my email I would love any pictures you have of my love lol ;) I have a few now love and biggest hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

seabhac

16 years 1 month ago

Jayne just delightful

I especially loved the lines let the calligraphy of your tongue write a thousand love notes and leave them beneath my skin so tactile and touchable...yum Seabhac

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Dear Liz

I reckon Yum is about right lol ... Yum is such a luscious word isnt it ? hmmm you have given me an idea this could be wicked, look what you started lol thanks for the read and I am glad you liked those lines they are my favourites as well love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Bonitaj

16 years 1 month ago

such depths of passion

and emotion only you can take us too without maudlin sentimentality! This one is smokin! Cheers Boni

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Boni

I dont know where they come from but when I write ones like this piece they just flow ... actually I do know where they come from, my muse of lust lol but that would be telling wouldnt it shhhh love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Ross Hamilton Hill

16 years 1 month ago

hmmm

well i see it hasn't been all cold nights in tempestuous taree, loved this, especially the opening verse and the ending, its great to share love, makes us all feel more human (atleast reclusive old me does) all the best ross

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Ross

Its been cold up here hun, freezing last night, I looked like a fashion victim but I was warm had enough clothes on to heat a small country lol it got down to 4 here where I live ... very happy you liked this one ...love should be shared and celebrated not hidden imho ... thanks for the read and the lovely comment love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

club special

16 years 1 month ago

Wow do I ever like the title

Wow do I ever like the title of this poem-- Its just so original! I knew I would find your stuff in here tonite if I looked hard enough. Five Gosh Darn Stars!! Club Special~

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Brian

I thought this title was unique as well and when it popped into my head I thought perfect ... big smiles I am very happy you liked it and I never had gosh darn stars before I am chuffed he he love and big smiles JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

hobo

16 years 1 month ago

Oh Baby

jimminie christmas my friend, I am in love again, third time today. very very hot and I like hot lol. I really like these lines I am bare with the touch of your sight, part the veils let the calligraphy of your tongue write a thousand love notes and leave them beneath my skin mmmmmmmmmm mmmmmmmmmmm :)

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Hobo

Got such a surprise when I saw a message from you expected you to be away, anyway I am very happy you liked it my friend ... who cannot not like hot eh? LOL big smiles love and thanks JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

sunscreen

16 years 1 month ago

Always in a good state of

Always in a good state of mind. Great poem :)

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Alex

LOL others would disagree with you ... but thanks for the lovely comment love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Navvy

I am chuffed you liked this one thanks for the lovely comment ((hugs)) love Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years 1 month ago

any one would

Any one would Love the burn and scorching within Life shall explode In ecstasy What say you of beauty? Excellent, Par excellence, When I can write like you do Some day I shall be a flickering flame About to finally extinguish LOVED

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

I say true beauty is

I say true beauty is unseen I say real beauty is quiet I believe beauty is everywhere as the flickering of the flame dies to nought the eye of beauty has left this hearth love and hugs Jayne-Chloe ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years ago

i am blessed

... They all say If you pass our way And Have as much as a glance We should feel blessed What a great chance Now starts a poetic romance Thanks ma'am You find time to read me I am I am I am..... The poetic nuisance A trainee amidst stalwarts Hope I’m not That awkward

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Loved

I sometimes think you know more than you say thats no different than in the light of today Train to round up the stars of the night just be yourself and all will be right ;) love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years ago

I Do

I admire you As a beauty Queen of poetry Some say When you have Seren read yours Uv’e made your day And To them I have this to say. When Seren passes my way A siren sounds in my mind Friend stay away Stay away Stay away The fire of fiery poetry Is on its way So do save your skin And Stay or run far away

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Loved

lmao I am so confused I but thanks for the lovely comment I have been sick so sorru for being late in answering you love and hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years ago

we hope...

Hope you have recovered fully, We all fall sick once in away, Like I am today… But tomorrow shall come, They all say… Will I be there tomorrow? Who can that say…? Still I live for The God gifted today…

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Loved

I have had leukemia for most of the time ive been here at neopoet ... we are aiming a remission and with a little bit of luck and fingers crossed just had a bad week with treatment but I am feeling a lot better today thanks for your kind wishes they are much appreciated I will be going to look what you have been up to in about five minutes looking forward to reading love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years ago

go no further

Seren and leukemia ... I am a funny person Making life a matter of laughter, I would’ve died Twenty years ago had I listened to a doctor Have a positive mind Take Ur medicine And To thyself be kind, Others will love to know u more As u urself Of Ur self share all the more. Diseases are inherent In all of us, Some fuss, Some don't. I am glad Ur a bold person And hope you face life, In full measure And twill be all Neopoet’s pleasure God give you the strength, To be brave And brave you are That’s all for now I can and wish to say These feelings erupted Extemporarily some how as for sharing today loved

xena465

16 years 1 month ago

WoW H.O.T

I almost remember that feeling now...thank you JayCee...Brilliant. Rosina xena465

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Rosina

If you can remember it darlin? you can write it ... I would love to see that side of your writing glad you liked this one love and big hugs JayCee x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

greeneyes

16 years 1 month ago

Jayne

sometimes I hesitate to comment because i sound like a broken record. i do not want to sound like a silly person without much to say. I envy your writing skills, I have never come across a poem of yours that was not worthy of five stars. This one left me breathless. Elizabeth

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Elizabeth

Broken record or nought I love knowing when you guys enjoy my scribbles .. and thanks for that great compliment I dont think they always do lol love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years ago

u say u R....

.....Only folks like you Break any kind of records And You say you are already broken You have yet too break Many a record And Have people utterly shaken See I am just no poet Yet Nor am I mistaken No not a record Have I yet broken Some give me five stars As a token So that my spirit Is not taken…

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Loved

I give five stars when they are earned and I sure am broken but my spirit burns love and hugs JayCee ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years ago

SPECIAL MESSAGE

replicated hence deleted

loved

16 years ago

SPECIAL MESSAGE

duplicate

Seren

16 years ago

I dont write for records or

I dont write for records or for fame and acclaim I write with the passion that flows through my veins Smiles love and hugs Jayne ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

loved

16 years ago

U WRITE because...

u can and are able to do i write because i want to achieve what have you...

mantiscepter

16 years 1 month ago

Parted lips

Very well written Seren, I liked Most all of It. then it ended. It was warm and inviting, sexy and tense. steamy girl.. Love John.

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear John

sorry about it ending but there are a couple more like this one waiting to be posted lol so very happy you liked it love and big hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

Electric Blue

16 years ago

The parted lips of a whim

Dear Lady Jayne Wow what can one say. Just so beautiful But the one verse that really strikes us all I am bare with the touch of your sight part the veils let the caligraphy of your tongue write a thousand love notes and leave them beneath my skin As the pulsing heat of you Brushed my thighs I let the force of my release find me untethered beautiful. Electric blue

Seren

16 years ago

Heya Maggie Blue (hugs)

Been a while since I seen you huni ... hope your well? I am so very happy you liked my poem big hugs and love JayCee x x x P.S I am getting a new phone number will text it to you when I get my new phone on thursday, dont know the number yet lol ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")

lou

16 years ago

Hot stuff

Very steamy and sensuous, love it Lou x

Seren

16 years ago

Dear Lou

glad you liked it sorry to be late answering I been in bed sick most of the week love and hugs Jayne-Chloe x x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")