Diamonds Shine

It’s cold and darkAs I waitLooking outInto the darknessWaiting for thatSpecial sparkleOn the railTo show myWheels are on trackThe sound vibratesBreaking the silenceOf the morningAnother day beginsLights stream inShattering myPeaceful darknessMy special placeWhere no can enter Soft and silentInto the darknessMy heart beatsLouder quickeningThe air filled withSuspenseTranquillity

— Electric Blue, Dec 27, 2009

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lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Mistress of Nature

Well written and enjoyable to read. Well, are you on track? I hope so. Tranquility, yes, what a beautiful feeling. Diamonds do shine. Love to you and yours, from Lyz. XX

Electric Blue

16 years 5 months ago

Diamonds Shine

Lyz Thank you for looking at my poem This is a poem about me waiting at my tram stop in the early hours of the morning to go to work. I sit in the darkness with only the smell of the wet earth the newness of the day. I look out deep into the darkness waiting for my tram come around the curve in the darkness So the light of the tram glints on the rail as it aproaches so like diamond shine then the sound of the tram on the tracks the vibrtations get louder This shatters the silence of my morning - another day begins. Thank you for you coments Love to your and yours as for me there is only me always blue

Nordic cloud

16 years 5 months ago

Life is a wondering, wondering, wondering...

Did you fall asleep again after the sudden shock? The lines I see those of a train shining silver, then a whole number of lights from vehicles shining into your bedroom and just as suddenly they disappear leaving nothing but the darkness, the comfort of your own hidey hole. Your wheels, are they those of the diamond on your hand, its tread, its facets showing you the way with their refracted lights, making new paths of colour for your inspiration in life and giving you new courage to go forward into the unknown? That's what I feel, knowing your past I see this. "Where no can enter"...no one? "The sound vibrates"...could it be sounds vibrate( slightly more logical?) My love to you and hope it to be true, this new departure into a fascinating future dear Maggie, love from Ann

Electric Blue

16 years 5 months ago

Diamonds Shine

Ann What a wonderful idea. Sorry alas totally different from what you have thought up It was just about me alone waiting for my tram in the early hours. see my comment to Lyz it will expalin always my friend maggie

Nordic cloud

16 years 5 months ago

Not so totally different,

Not so totally different, the tram lines I saw and you pondering them in the lights of passing traffic. The other was wishful thinking for you dear Maggie, may the thoughts bear fruits and give you diamonds in your eyes again as you have here in your picture. I wish that so much for you, as then you can paint your life in words so dazzling. Don't you think? Yes. My love and all the best to you Maggie from Ann.

chrisbyrne

16 years 5 months ago

Solice at the tram stop

Nice post! Just a little window into that safe place-in the day but not yet fully part of it.

Electric Blue

16 years 4 months ago

Diamonds Shine

Chris Yes special time of the day but the noise break the silence of my peace. Electric blue