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Oct 28, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

REVENGE

Caught up between
the vague and the loud
honesty veiled under a
burdening shroud .

Pride fractured by
dismembered events
hell bent on crossing
any divide without
pausing to armour my
mortal flesh .

No time to explain
in case the seeds of
doubt may spit with
rain revengeful pain
tears of anger from my
vein ,the very sight of
you may split an atom
in my brain .

Without the want of gain
i remain resolute .

— ziggy, Oct 28, 2009

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Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Resolute. What a difficult

Resolute. What a difficult end. Courage my friend. ;-) ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha

ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

revenge

enda, patrick collins. hi there mmm this one would be hard for me to explain its not that i cant i am not really ready to , many thanks for the read ,,,,,,,,yours ziggy

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Getting better and better, well done on another gem. And this nosy friend wants to know who the revenge is for. Okay, keep it to yourself,lol. Very well written. Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX

ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

revenge

enda, patrick collins. LOL HI I`M TELLING YE the story on this and what a nice comments many thanks lyz its great therapy the pen that is chat soon,,,,,,,,,

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Hey Ziggy

Good title, great language usage, mysterious theme. You do know how to draw the reader in. Might this poem have something to do with a treachery perpetrated on you by someone close to you? My favorite lines are: Pride fractured by dismembered events hell bent on crossing any divide without pausing to (armor) my mortal flesh Always, Cat

ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

revenge

enda, patrick collins. mmmmmmmmm hi cat i thought i had replyed lol where did it go , anyway a mysterious theme indeed and this is a story that has yet to run its course , not saying any more , a nod is as good as a wink ,,,,,,,,,,cheers for the comment cat and the perty stars .....ziggy

Proprietress o…

16 years 7 months ago

can I call you Zigs, Zigs?

I love this poem, another one I love, with its melody and its unique rhyme form. the last stanza especially, it's my favorite, from rain to pain, from vein to brain, then the transition to the last two lines, gain to remain. I have never been able to add so many words that all rhyme each other into such a small amount of lines but you make it work splendidly! seriously awesome! you have brought them all "under one hat" as we say in german. I love it and wouldn't change a thing! your Proprietress

ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

revenge

enda, patrick collins. lol hi you can call me zigs , i`ve been called worse jepers you see more in my words than i do my self , your very good and commenting on poetry you have a nack for it and having read some of your work this comment is so good to get from you that has mmade my evening chat soon proprietress ,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

Proprietress

"under one hood"...we say here in the UK...LOL! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

Ziggy

Ziggy, you already know my thoughts on this one. I must say you have a great 'Editor'!! LOL! Seriously, this is without doubt your best work to date. I connect and feel each line. It draws the reader in with your powerful imagery and hard-baked words. Bitter all the way through...superb! 5 stars without a doubt. I said it would be 'spotlight'...it is almost there. You'll owe me a bottle of JD if you do get your rightful 'spotlight' moment. HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

ha ha it made it

enda, patrick collins. hey hood cheers man spot , , i must thank you for your input nice one cheers for the vote of confidence there is a story to this but i am not near ready to tell its tale but the pen is great therapy chAT SOON MAN ,,,,,,,,ZIG ,,,,A BOTTLE OF JACK ,,LOL

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

You can tell me...

...all about it when I come over to Ireland for that JD. night mate, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Electric Blue

16 years 6 months ago

Revenge

Ziggy Great writing my friend. The pen is the best way. It is always my best council my only friend. Me of all should be revengful about my life as so much has happened to me by others. The hurt the constant pain. But all I can do is love. I am not revengefull but should be. I do see the other side too but why I let it be I do not know - it come downs to love for me. Blinded I may well be as others tell me but no I go in with eyes wide open and just love. As I see the hurt and the struggle in the other person trying to come to terms it will be a long hard journey but I will stand by them no matter what. For you to put in down on paper is so good even if you do not put all down in words others can read from them the hurt the pain you still hold but you are letting it go slowly this can only be good the healing has started. Even if you do not think so. letting go of hurt just so hard to do Oh do I know Stay strong my friend Blue