Electric Blue

Apr 05, 2008 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Twixt Twilight and Dawn

No more candle light suppers
No more candle light baths
No more making love under the stars
No more rides to the sea shore
No more making love to the sea's roar
As waves over lap us
At daylight we mourn
No force on earth
Can compare
To the power of our love
Anytime Anyplace Anywhere

— Electric Blue, Apr 05, 2008

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Country/Region: GBR

Critiques

professor

18 years 2 months ago

Suicide

I can't even begin to imagine what that must have been like for you Maggie and how you must have felt thinking that his mother was more important to him than staying with you. Its a brief but poignant poem. I don't really feel i want to critique it under the circumstances but did just wonder whether "lap over" rather than "over lap" might be better. Keith

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

Twixt Twilight and dawn

Keith I knew Mike was a manic depressive i have lived with him on eggshells when the light goes out and the joy and wonder of when the light was on so totally different. Of course i am very sad he is not here to love me but i have all our memories and he is still with me. He was my first love and i was his.

Candlewitch

18 years 2 months ago

Maggie

This must have been a terrible time for you. How on Earth did you stay sane adrift in this insanity? I agree with the professor on this one, all the way around. Always, Cat

Electric Blue

18 years 2 months ago

death

Well there is nothing you can do as it is out of your hands and again the survivor has to carry on - why am i still here again in no where land. Well it seems i will be on my own again forever i cannot see the point of being here at all

Electric Blue

18 years 1 month ago

Loss

Hi cat Well friends ask me the same question as i was dealing with the three deaths in three years 1999 2000 2001. It is not easy keeping all the paperwork seperate all the bills seperate I also had to work so to pay for all the funerals and medical bills etc sadly they were not insure. Others cannot understand how i did not turn to drink and drugs. Well i turned to my writing my art and music they were and still my council and great comfort.

Barbara Writes

18 years 2 months ago

Sorry for your plight

Keep on keeping on Smiles:) Barbara

dbaker

18 years 1 month ago

My Scottish Grandmother had

My Scottish Grandmother had a saying for when you come across a person who was deep in pain. I am sad to think that you have probably heard it. Aife Robertson used to say, "I am sorry for your troubles." If you would entertain a mere idea of a change to this piece I would ask you to look at it like this: No more... candle light suppers candle light baths making love under the stars rides to the sea shore making love to the sea’s roar As waves over lap us At daylight we mourn No force on earth Can compare To the power of our love Anytime Anyplace Anywhere This is just an exercise in negative space. Once again I am sorry for your troubles. I hope you can forgive a meddling person. I love the emotional power that you put into this piece. Slainte' Maith. -DS Baker

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

death

Hello my friend No you are not meddling. Others see it differently but i could not see through my tears the pen just moved over the page until it was done.

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

After reading all the comments since I commented

Smiles:) Barbara Saddest story ever. My pain for you is real. Glad you are here and hope you continue to be well. Yesterday was a low day for me. Woke up this morning sugar too low to function,passed out unexpectedly. Here I can relax and rest and still have fun while too tired to do anything else. Your poem is lovely. Sanity precious of all the words in the dictionary.

Electric Blue

17 years 8 months ago

Twixt twilight and dawn

Hi Barbara Thank you so very much for your support I do hope you are better is it from diabeatis etc. WEll as i said i do not know why i have had to travel this journey to be where i am but now i feel i had too - I am in limbo but i try to carry on my doing my writing my Artwork photography etc. To get out of bed every morning, i need a reason? right now i find none?

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

No not diabetes

Smiles:) Barbara Doctor say not. I check my sugar with my diabetic father in law machine and found out mine was in the 60 way too low. Normal is 80 and up. Didn't know for years, been that way from my teens. Eating and rest was all I ever knew to do and continue to do. Taking it slow and finding something enjoyable to do like writing poetry keeps me from being bored and depressed all the time. People will know and missed you. Depression speaks falsehood. You have a lot of activity going on around you that you love doing. You is on this site you must get up to do that, to write, and your many other passions you mention in your comments. I am sure other reasons are there waiting for you that you find joy in. Look for the positive its there. then the natural earth it have lots of beautiful wonders to absorb. My depression and paranoid keeps me from enjoying the family and friends I do have. The sunrise is here the sunset gives its glory glad I am here to see it The moon shine its light bright in the night skies glad I am here to see it The birds sing medleys from the tree by my back door glad I am here to hear it Just made this up, hope it makes you feel better.

Electric Blue

18 years 1 month ago

lost

Hi Barbara, my friend has diabetes 2 but he is an amazing Artist and friend but he has told me of his feelings for me but i told him i care for him as a friend yes i could be financially secure with him but that is no good without love. But the love i have found or found me but he gets by day by day etc of course i love the way of this because he lives very simplistic daily which is how i am to. We are both poets artist musicians etc we do share so much and talk endlessly. we are both resourceful, impulsive and can get by on not too much so enjoy what each day brings but he is insecure about his commitment again so i feel in limbo. So i must do what i do i was down the other day but ideas come and i have decided to explore a little more in my travels. But of course he will be included in as much as he is in the same area and we will bump into each other etc and hopefully share a closer time etc. I know you have your writing but do you have any other talents? love and hugs maggie well i am early turn at the Police station so off to work now speak later

Barbara Writes

18 years 1 month ago

Yes

Smiles:) Barbara Yes, but not interesting as the talents I see mention here. I just poor country girl.

dsaranti

18 years 1 month ago

Very good

Concise, powerful, meaningful. We seem to agree. There's nothing like the power of love in this world. I think I explain this in "The long journey to his Ithaki, to love..." and "Elaine". Kind regards, Your friend Dimitri Dimitri Sarantis