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the water horse
and when the rain falls
I ask myself,
'would god shed tears over
humanity when humanity has
forgotten why we were taught hope'
if every planet up there
became as bleak as earth
would he scream or shout
the way humans do
i imagine his anger
over the willingness to die
before our time is over
because someone said
today's youth are restless, useless
and too insular to care
too concerned with
wanting to fix all of the blackness
without ever setting foot
into the light
i am at an age it all comes and goes
the right and the wrong of it
the good and evil
life and death
and i have no idea
how i can change a thing
how faith can be mistrusted
used as morality
and then call it christianity
inviting everyone to say
only the meek inherit the earth
as if weakness is rewarded
as if death is the reward
for the reasons some
didn't choose to live
sky is just sky
and heaven?
is a word with
no reason to exist...
and rain falls
the poets are flustered
by days of tides
drowning as they run away
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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Is the internal logic consistent?
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Region & Country
Melbourne, Australia
Favorite Poets
Bukowski, Neruda, Rumi, Gibran, Jeffers, Corso, Waldman, Kerouac
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CCfire
Wed, 2011-04-13 03:12
the water horse
is actually a scottish legend in their folklore and I suspect Irish folklore as well. I find it hard to reconcile Christianity and it's morality of saving the weak and rewarding the meek and mild when the strong and the powerful, and I do mean that with respect, not the overlords or terrorists but the people who take charge of their lives are seemingly left out of the religious equation. I can't see the grace aspect I guess of only finding a home with god if we accept with servility and grace but then again I've always seen the bible as a good fairytale and religion is not something I truly want to debate with anyone as it's a personal choice how we see it. Thanks for reading.
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
author commentCCfire
Wed, 2011-04-13 04:01
Sweet Shirl
I follow my own beliefs too and am not one who admires ordered religion. I read far too much philosophy for that, I have just finished The Antichrist by Nietzsche and to me some of it made far more sense that what they tell us from a pulpit. Some would say Friedrich was just an insane man with a quick wit akin to a game show host but those people are only reading the surface of his work. It actually is really quite inspiring to read. :)
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
author commentNordic cloud
Tue, 2011-04-26 11:17
Not religious but God has a
Not religious but God has a capital G
"'would god shed tears over"
The powers that be say so!
I like your Nietzsche quote...smile.
LuvAnn
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
CCfire
Tue, 2011-04-26 17:28
god has a capital if it were
god has a capital if it were not for my Nietzsche beliefs, so there fore without any substantiating evidence for me he remains without a capital.
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
author commentRace_9togo
Tue, 2011-04-26 22:05
Hi Chez,
A good write.
Usually, when I post a pagan poem, I explicitly state in Last Words that I am completely uninterested in theological debate.
That usually does the trick!
almost forgot: Water Horse is Scottish....also called a Kelpie. It takes the form of a beautiful horse until you touch it, whereupon you stick to it, and it drags you down to drown. Nice Beasties.
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo
CCfire
Tue, 2011-04-26 23:51
Yeah I'd heard the legend lol
Yeah I'd heard the legend lol I thought it sort of fitted perfectly...not my cup of tea though, glad I didn't see any on my trip to Dundee lol
Chez
"The perfect woman perpetrates literature as she does a small sin: as an experiment, in passing, to see if anybody notices it - and to makes sure that somebody does." - Nietzsche
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