I see that you are not actively editing this poem, but I thought I would stop in anyway.

This poem definitely has an important universal message for readers and the writer too! I think it's interesting, yet a bit tragic, that often times people are very positive, understanding, and supportive towards others. We write poems like this one to remind each other that mistakes happen, that we are there for each other, and everything will be all right in the end if we support each other. Yet, we become so harsh and critical towards ourselves. We hold double standards against ourselves. We have no patience with ourselves if we can't hone a skill or learn something new quickly enough. We berate ourselves and wonder why we even bother if we're just going to screw up so often.

At least, this is the practically universal experience I see with students at the university where I work, all ages of students too! There are plenty of "non-traditional" (older) students at my university who have been in the real world longer than I have been alive who fall into this mindset as soon as they return to school. It's hard to deal with, but as a tutor and teaching assistant, I try to make it my job to remind people of the truths which you have shared in this poem.

If I could make a few suggestions, if you ever decide to go back and revise this poem, they are as follows:

There are a few small typos that you may consider checking on:

"We look at are world" --> "We look at our world"

"to many to count" --> "too many to count"

Also, something that may be a good exercise for you with this poem might be to add a few stanzas and explore what makes you who you are! For example, after the first stanza, you might show readers what things we can't see about you specifically. Since you've told us that there are things about you that we can't see, it almost sets the reader up to expect to learn what those things are. You make the reader curious to know by writing the opening stanza this way. Just like when people are gossiping and someone says "don't look now, but such and such is doing something embarrassing," saying "don't look now" is a sure-fire why to make somebody look. Ha!

To build off of that, your note at the end of the poem says the purpose is to remind people of their purpose and meaning in life. What is your purpose? Do you feel like you have a grasp on what it is? Some people know from a very young age what they want to do in life, not just a career, but their purpose on this earth. Others take a very long time to uncover what they are here for. Others don't even care, sadly!

I've known for a long time I want to help people and be a life-long learner. I want to instill a love of learning in others too. I have always felt at home in places of learning and surrounded by books. Because school and learning are so hard and sometimes inaccessible for people, I want to change that in whatever little ways that I can.

What about you? I would be eager to know, if you are comfortable opening up! Pondering on this topic and adding it to your poem would also make the poem stand out and unique and personal. The poem could then become your motto, your miniature manifesto!

Want some tips on writing more specifically or using images to elaborate on a poem? Check these articles out: 

http://daphne.palomar.edu/handbook/specific.htm

http://www.poetryarchive.org/glossary/imagery

Take care,

Kelsey