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Guardian Angel (Mirror/rorriM)
Guardian Angel
when it's all over
only the wanting remains
the struggle goes unspoken
whispering Grandma's name
you feels the stirring echoes
of your Grandma's heart's gentle touch
you couldn't find words to tell her
you misses her so terribly much
now she's your special angel
watching down from above
guiding your uncertain footsteps
tenderly with all her love
knowing her spirit never left you
will bring comfort from the pain
when the struggle goes unspoken
her love will shelter you from the rain...
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Comments
lou
Mon, 2011-08-08 13:27
Cat
Awesome as usual, i find it hard to find fault
love lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Candlewitch
Fri, 2012-01-27 13:14
*Hugs
and thanks, Lou!
always, Cat
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