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When a child Gave me Advice (Words That Count)
Most Children have hearts that are pure
Thoughts that are not surrounded by
Half held truths
When they offer their advice we really should think
About what they are saying
Because they're seeing what is, not what is expected
Not words we want to hear but
Words that reflect what they feel
Without fear, without compulsion
They speak what they feel
From their limited thoughts
Without regard to those that hear
They answer quickly
With instant thoughts aimed at helping
Friends and family
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Comments
Geezer
Tue, 2023-03-14 10:05
In order to...
be eligible for the challenges, the title must include the title of the challenge, you may use a subtitle.
Example: "When a Child Gave me Advice" [They Used Words That Count]. This is the way we have done it from inception of the Challenges. Yes, I agree, children do have that guilelessness that sometimes puts adults in embarrassing positions. BTW
Your title has a typo!
~ Geezer.
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Clentin
Tue, 2023-03-14 10:48
Thank you Will reset title
Thank you
Will reset title
Candlewitch
Tue, 2023-03-14 10:06
dear Clentin,
I would change the first line to read:
(Most) children have hearts that are pure
in childhood I had a sister whose heart was not...she is a sociopath.
*hugs, Cat
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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Clentin
Tue, 2023-03-14 10:49
Thank you
Thank you
You are right “most” is better
Thanks
Clentin
Tue, 2023-03-14 11:20
When a child gave me advice
Just thoughts about how children often respond to various situations
Clentin
Tue, 2023-03-14 12:02
Thank you. I appreciate your
Thank you. I appreciate your comments
Hon
Tue, 2023-03-14 22:09
Children
Your poem provide a spectacular perspective about children’s way of thinking. They speak from their mind. And we need to be more considerate of their needs. Often time we overlook their thought of mind and neglecting their feeling.
Thank you for sharing this.
Clentin
Tue, 2023-03-14 22:11
Thank you for your comments.
Thank you for your comments. I often think that what children say provides us with a different “free” point of view
Rosewood Apothecary
Wed, 2023-03-15 18:52
I love this
It’s just gorgeous. Bravo. Really superb.
Tim