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Judges
I heard the crows
while walking today.
They cried from high trees,
perched like watchmen
sending out a call to arms,
warning of some unforeseen
mischief, an omen, perhaps,
for another day.
I stopped to listen,
watched as they flew from
one branch to another,
voices rising,
their black robes worn
like high court judges,
keen eyes on the world below,
allowing me to pass
as I considered their
abrupt, discerning
silence.
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Seren
Thu, 2023-02-16 00:25
Dear L
You've made me rethink the image of my crows on the back fence, I'll now see their black robes sitting in judgement.
This is a very clever write. I can't find one thing I'd change.
Brava
Hugs Jayne x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Lavender
Thu, 2023-02-16 10:35
Hello, Jayne,
Crows are so spiritual and intellectual - so mysterious. They were cawing wildly, and then when I passed by, they just stopped. A bit eerie.
Thank you for reading, my friend!
L
RoseBlack
Thu, 2023-02-16 07:05
They are rather judgmental
Normally they sit on the telephone wire looking down. I used to watch them while swimming at my parents and they always seemed to be watching what I was doing. Now I will wonder what they are there thinking. A clever...enjoyable write. Well done.
~RoseBlack~
Lavender
Thu, 2023-02-16 10:38
Hello, Carrie,
I know you love birds, too. Crows just seem to be so independent and wise. I don't think they answer to anyone but themselves. I just love them, and I hope they kinda like me back.
Thank you for reading! I always appreciate your comments!
L
Clentin
Sat, 2023-02-18 10:44
Very accurate picture. I
Very accurate picture. I never thought about it much but now that I have read the poem it, I have seen this scene many many times!
Clentin
Sat, 2023-02-18 10:44
Very accurate picture. I
Very accurate picture. I never thought about it much but now that I have read the poem it, I have seen this scene many many times!
Lavender
Sat, 2023-02-18 11:26
Hello, Clentin,
The more I witness these amazing birds, the more I love them! A bit of magic in our own backyards!
Thank you for reading,
L
lovedly
Sat, 2023-02-18 13:53
crows are jet black they judge
like black bats or blacker cats
far distant Saturn doesn't know
what is white
what sblack
so they are all here
one night's judge
LAV
Lavender
Sat, 2023-02-18 16:49
Hi, Lovedly,
I always appreciate your time! I never really noticed that they looked like judges' robes until I felt their eyes on me as I passed. :)
Thank you!
Lav
lovedly
Sun, 2023-02-19 00:36
yeah Lav
As time passes one learns....