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Partitions
During the absent days,
although you were near
but at the same time
in some other place,
love may have been there
but I had to guess
most of the time,
and I was terrible at it
Style / type:
Free verse
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How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2023-02-03 07:08
Difficult
It’s tough to sit with this in a relationship. Sometimes the communication isn’t there. Sometimes it’s not for lack of trying, just other circumstances. It’s very sad but very devotional. I like that.
Tim
Michael Anthony
Sun, 2023-02-05 15:24
Yep, yep and yep! Thanks Tim.
Yep, yep and yep! Thanks Tim.
Best
Michael Anthony
Geezer
Fri, 2023-02-03 14:29
Absolutely...
felt this one! There was this girl... and anyway, she didn't know I existed, let alone have a glance at me.
I like the title, it fits, "Partitioned" off from the same plane as you. The theme is good and one that could be visited from either side. It begins and ends well. ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony
Sun, 2023-02-05 15:27
The last line was a familiar
The last line was a familiar place for me on a number of occasions Geez, sigh... Partitions = things that divide us. Thank you for stopping by.
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Michael Anthony