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Under the Mistletoe

Submitted by Hon on Tue, 2022-12-13 12:03

I came to you
on Christmas day
to express my love for you
for the joy that you brought
into my life
filled with a sense of warmth
to see the radiant smile
on your face
with the question
that I popped to you
down on my knee
in asking you
to be my lovely wife
my heart was hoping
for the answer to "Yes"!
in witnessing our lips
pressed gently against
each other
in celebrating this special occasion
with a truly blessing gift
on a holiday season
that instilled a great memory
to be cherished forever

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Contest: 
December 2022 Random Challenge Under the Mistletoe
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Jackweb

Tue, 2022-12-13 13:29

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I came to you
on Christmas day
to express my love for you
for the joy that you ×(bring) (brought)✓
into my life

Very nice meditation words fancy arrangement.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Hon

Tue, 2022-12-13 15:47

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Thank you for the feedback. Yes, thank you for catching the past-tense usage.

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Jackweb

Tue, 2022-12-13 16:40

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Dear poet!
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

Triskelion

Wed, 2022-12-14 02:22

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..I don't see what the issue was with the word "bring". If you could explain it please.
Thanks

Thomas

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...so like my lost dreams...the flood

Lavender

Tue, 2022-12-13 19:06

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Hello Hon,
A lovely poem capturing a very special moment!
Thank you,
L

Rula

Wed, 2022-12-14 05:51

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I am late to this thread, so I agree with Lavender.and wish you the best at the contest.

P.S May be you'd like to edit your title to go with the contest title( It should be the same) as a condition to win

Pls.find it here
https://www.neopoet.com/contest/december-2022-random-challenge-under-mis...

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lovedly

Thu, 2022-12-15 13:08

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I wonder if you know I am ROSE also

RoseBlack

Thu, 2022-12-29 19:57

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The holidays can bring such joy! Thank you for sharing.

~RoseBlack~

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