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Fall Off The Ladder
As I watch his frame
ascend each step,
climbing further upward,
I warn my adult son,
"Please, do not fall off the ladder."
There is a satisfying sound
to those words when
spoken all together:
fallofftheladder.
My poetic mind wanders
to zen-like thoughts, and the
possibilities of such a quirky word...
Fallofftheladder, (NC, IA, WI)
has a delightful ring to it,
Pop, 652, 2015 census.
Or perhaps it is an
equilibrium condition
brought on by riding
too many roller coasters.
I can imagine a menu
listing a large pizza -
extra toppings over extra toppings,
smothered with mounds of cheese,
selling out after each Friday
night football game.
But for now, I hold this
fifteen-rung monster
with my eyes closed,
pray that this kid
descends safely, and upright -
unlike the sizable broken branch
adorning the roof.
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Comments
Geezer
Mon, 2022-10-03 18:14
A real place?...
Is the [Fallofftheladder], [NC, IA, WI] a real place? Multiple places?
I am not making a connection between two stanzas in the middle;
are they just things to think about while holding the ladder
so as not to think too much about the fact that the son is on the ladder?
A little explanation here, could go a long way to making or breaking this piece.
~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Lavender
Tue, 2022-10-04 08:25
Good morning, Geezer!
These are all off-the-cuff thoughts while dealing with the anxiety of holding the ladder. I'll put some thought into this to make that more apparent.
Thank you!
L
Geezer
Tue, 2022-10-04 08:36
I thought...
that might be the case. ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Geezer
Tue, 2022-10-04 19:17
Better...
Much better! ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Lavender
Tue, 2022-10-04 19:29
Thank you
for helping me, my poetical mentor and friend!
L
Geezer
Tue, 2022-10-04 19:34
I am...
deeply honored on both counts! Thank you! ~ Geez.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
lovedly
Tue, 2022-10-04 19:38
nostalgic
yes memories last for ever
just recollect
DOG WALKERS Lav
Lavender
Tue, 2022-10-04 19:47
Visited your tender poem!
Bittersweet, but in a good way.
L
lovedly
Tue, 2022-10-04 21:50
this is NOT UR PAGE SO WILL CLEAR ALL ZING ZANG
OK