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I turned Into A Savage...
I am truly ravenous
in an awful state
Stomach touching backbone
I can't remember when I ate
It must be a while ago
my vision's growing dim
Legs are getting shaky
my vigor's lost it's vim
The scent of barbecue
wafting down the street
making my mouth water
It sure would be a treat!
But my procedure in an hour
shouldn't have a trace
of fecal-matter in there
said the doctor with a face
Yeah, I'm doing one of those
it's that time again
Every couple of years
I suffer from this pain
Now, it's done and over
I can finally eat!
Headed for the burger-joint
and my favorite treat
My face buried up to nose
a child's eyes grow big and round
as he watches me devour it
with growling, snuffling sounds
I should have saved some money
headed home to the fridge
But my hunger overpowered me
I turned into a savage!
Comments
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-07-15 11:35
dear Geezer,
but, it was a burger, after all, how could you possibly turn it down!!! was it plain? or with cheese? what kind of cheese? did you have tomato slices? or onions? raw of fried? was it medium rare, or well done? you have spoken to the burger beast in me!
ever, eddy
*Hugs, Cat
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Geezer
Fri, 2022-07-15 13:43
My wife and I...
love our Burger-King Whoppers! Mine is with tomato, pickles, onion, mayo and catsup. no cheese or lettuce. Having home-made F.F.s and burgers tonight, with salad; [the only way I eat lettuce]. Hugs for the burger beast!
~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-07-15 13:53
hooray for takeout!
I'll see if I can get Steve to go for it...
*beastly hugs!
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Rosewood Apothecary
Fri, 2022-07-15 19:15
Had a good chuckle
Yeah brother, you’re not yourself when you’re hangry. Pretty flawless.
Geezer
Fri, 2022-07-15 19:30
Yes...
being "hangry" is an awful feeling. Thanks for the read and comment, glad that you had a chuckle! ~ Geez.
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RoseBlack
Sat, 2022-07-16 08:33
Hangry
I am a firm believer that this is an actual emotion and that first bite of whatever will restore your good nature is truly amazing. My comfort food these days are air fried pierogi's. Great write!
~RoseBlack~
Geezer
Sat, 2022-07-16 08:55
Thank you...
for the read and comment. Yes! Hangry is a true emotion, and it can be tamed with only certain things. At first, it might be tamed with a few bites of almost anything; but then, you start thinking about what would be the best, and afore ya know it, you have fixated on a particular item and nothing else satisfies! ~ Geez.
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Geezer
Mon, 2022-07-18 14:08
Funny that...
Thanks for the read and comment.~ Geezer.
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