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Love me O Dawn
my Love
in the moonlight
I see your sparkling face
recollect your charming smile
where can anyone ever trace
love so tender
except in your romance
the candle light flickers tonight
all fire burns me
like a forest
champagne we shall have
enjoy some water of coconut
candy served with tea
when I think of you
so modest
love and my heart shall rejoice
tenderness and tears
would be your choice
Dawn
there can be no intrusion
but
TO BE CONTINUED AS PART SECOND
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
IN TWO PARTS NEO EDITOR ADVISED Therefore the but...
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-06-03 09:50
dear lovedly,
favorite lines are:
the candle light flickers tonight
all fire burns me
like a forest
exquisite!!! waiting on pt# 2
*hugs, Cat
*
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lovedly
Fri, 2022-06-03 11:06
SHALL
TIME LIMIT 23 HOURS WAIT CATS
Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-06-03 11:54
okay
will do!
*hugs, (the) Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
lovedly
Fri, 2022-06-03 12:40
please wait
to continue loving dawn 10 hours more
Jackweb
Fri, 2022-06-03 17:33
Hello Lovedly!
This is beautifully crafted poem. I just admire the whole lines. I adore your literary mind.
Nice written poem!
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
lovedly
Fri, 2022-06-03 20:07
Thanks all above
GEE must be busy
keep waiting ten hours
neos hold is 23 hours
lovedly
Sat, 2022-06-04 13:32
this is DAWN ONE
DAWN HAS ALSO BEEN POSTED DO read this FIRST enjoy the fullest A long lost maiden love Where is DAWN she comes every day You see her only if you are awake She makes everyone's day Yours too may
lovedly
Sat, 2022-06-04 20:13
read this first others are welcome or is my time worthless neos
this is part one