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Just An Average "Guy?"
"Just An Average Guy?"
he is the ideal in her eyes,
someone to look up to.
he is smart and quick
with a defined point of view.
he is a desired good friend
with a quirky sense of humor
he can spot a fraud in ten paces
he's not one to act on, or spread rumor!
honest and trustworthy he inspires faith
he has a valid point, gets right to it
he is a real straight shooter
he is a dead-eye and is right on target
don't be fooled by his easy ways,
underneath them he is quick as a wink
he's got you dead to rights,
clearly, he isn't what you think!
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Comments
scribbler
Wed, 2022-05-11 09:23
OK
I give up who is he?
Candlewitch
Wed, 2022-05-11 09:50
dear Scribbler,
see the Guy below!
*hugs, Cat
p.s.
just think how this would come out if eddy styx wrote it, LOL!
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Geezer
Wed, 2022-05-11 09:28
Hmmmm...
Must be the great detective...
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Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-05-12 06:43
dear Geezer,
"Hmmmm...
Must be the great detective..."
what do you mean by this?
sincerely, Cat
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Geezer
Thu, 2022-05-12 06:52
I have been...
reading the works of Sir Arthur Conan Doyle, as of late. Your description of the character in the last stanza, reminded me of Sherlock Holmes and those other detectives like Columbo [Peter Falk]. Those detectives that portray the easy-going and bumbling shylocks, but who are in reality, sharp as a tack. Remember Columbo? ~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-05-12 07:10
dear Geez,
I'm glad that this poem generated such amusement for you. I only meant it to honor you as my unofficial mentor, like I honored Stan & Susan. I really liked your poem, it is snappy and sharp! next I have written a poem about "One" which I shall post as soon as I can.
*hugs, Cat
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Geezer
Thu, 2022-05-12 07:21
Indeed...
I am humbled by your description and the obvious high esteem you place upon my brow. I am extremely pleased and a little amused that someone might be so inclined to call me a mentor. I deeply appreciate your portrayal of me in such glowing terms. You are a most apt and sharp pupil, that has been a source of constant amazment. Thank you! ~ Gee.
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Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-05-12 07:30
*hugs...
I have always thought of you as a teacher/mentor and aspired to be like you & Stan(I love his inner peace!) and then as a friend. and "One" is my brother. Large Marge and RoseBlack as sisters.my little neo family, so far.
*hugs, Cat
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Geezer
Thu, 2022-05-12 07:52
Your Neo Family...
appreciates your constant striving to be a friend to all and a diligent worker, who accepts every challenge. Thank you for being a part of our family! ~ Geez and the boys.
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Candlewitch
Thu, 2022-05-12 08:01
thank you Geezer,
I feel humbled
*hugs, Cat
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Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-05-13 09:14
I forgot...
Dalton!!! forgive me please?
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Geezer
Fri, 2022-05-13 09:28
Dalton?...
Who is Dalton?
Hugs back...~ Geez.
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Candlewitch
Fri, 2022-05-13 09:32
Dalton is
my friend who posts links to many fabulous places and pieces of music.
*hugs, Cat
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Jackweb
Wed, 2022-05-11 09:38
I guess...
This speaks the smartness and bravery of an intelligence officer or perhaps, a sniper!
"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
Candlewitch
Wed, 2022-05-11 09:53
LOL, a sniper!
I like that, "a Sniper" !!!
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One
Thu, 2022-05-12 03:16
Sis,
I've decided this isn't about Gee but ME!
Just my ego taking over.
LOL!
regards
One.
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"with all that I am & all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me"