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Just Flashed My Mind
Now I pass by other valleys
where water trickles
silently and slowly
I see nothing but greenery
hence no more do I feel lonely
Pass your time with an open mind
care not who is watching you
or here reading you
Comments now
fly over my bloated mind
as I am aged
and that there lies within my cage
no crime
later I post a poem
it may may not rhyme
but are you poet divine
wanting me to lay supine
Comment at your will Sire
I shall still admire
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
Sparrow 42
Thu, 2019-11-14 04:28
Loved
When I saw the title I became worried but it turns out that you wrote a very gentle piece. Just read it out and see that there are a couple of places that need attention,
Yours as always Ian ..
Words can build a nation
Geezer
Thu, 2019-11-14 07:32
Sometimes...
a person can worry about what others think a bit too much. ~ Gee.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
lovedly
Thu, 2019-11-14 11:48
a person can 'worry' about what others think a bit too much -Gee
Sorry Gee
I cater fr the intelligent ones
like me
Do you now agree
folks are born
just to say
you are born
to not dismay
c lynn brooks
Thu, 2019-11-14 15:05
lovedly
enjoyed readng ths I still try to respond to most poems note I said try lol
Chrys
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lovedly
Thu, 2019-11-14 22:36
your trying
is enough for me
I know you now do read me
hit me when I deserve it
praise me silently
I will know it
Thanks
clb
Rottiestyl
Thu, 2019-11-14 15:54
Lovedly
I liked this. I read to different subjects in here. Most would say that is confusing, but like art abstracts are for the individual to absorb their way, in their eye.
Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.
By: K. Mulroney
" I am who I am, say what I say, do what I do. With no apology."
Simon
Fri, 2019-11-15 07:20
Yap
Most of the times if you follow other people's comments you will get piesed up but there always a room for comments to flow in that's why no writter is more perfact than all.
lovedly
Fri, 2019-11-15 14:35
great views
yours
Simon its easier to comment and amend the written
Think of the guy who composed
what thoughts such a poem
had brought
his mind would have wrought
lovedly
Fri, 2019-11-15 14:36
yeah
yours
Simon its easier to comment and amend the written
Think of the guy who composed
what thoughts such a poem
had brought
his mind would have wrought
lovedly
Wed, 2020-03-18 08:40
This poem
Flashed my mind again I
was going to write again
now I shall reframe
From all comments
I have gained