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Why Did I Love You
Forever is long gone,
Tis tomorrow we bid farewell,
Now is reckoned,
Today is that reality.
The bell is tolled,
Walking down the aisle,
It's that resplendence,
My bride once my pride,
All but nostalgia.
How did this come to be?
romance all brilliance
bereft of tolerance,
Perchance all is nuisance,
Capacity full of clutter
Pshaw! What a charade.
Were memories fungible,
trying despite blemishes of self,
my question still arises,
Why did I love you?
© Uchenna Ozoekwe
aka Bethany Blaze
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments
lovedly
Tue, 2018-08-07 13:46
nice one here
if t is a contest entry u may see rules etc
MARK it as for contest
I am going to compose
soonly
Mikeozams
Tue, 2018-08-07 19:00
Thanks
I appreciate your reminder.
raj
Wed, 2018-08-08 17:12
besides good linguistic skill
besides good linguistic skill this poem also demonstrates how the choice of words w.r.t. their weightage amplify the meaning,,,instead of longer lines to convey the same...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
Mikeozams
Wed, 2018-08-08 19:32
Gratitude
You're right. I appreciate your comments. I will continue to get better.
Rula
Thu, 2018-08-09 02:42
Hello Mike
Thanks for introducing me to some new words especially "charade"
I thought the thought in the last stanza completes that in the one before the last, so I thought there is no need for the break maybe?
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