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My Love For You
It envelopes me,
Thoughts through emotions,
emotions fulfilled in actions.
It enraptures me,
dazed through my thoughts,
thoughts expressed in gales of language.
It unfurls me,
the curls and turns in my soul,
soul bespeaks as the heart exhales.
It pulls me,
Along the path of denouement,
From me to you, this build up states.
It knows no colour,
It bears no wrong,
Yea, things still go wrong.
Love is my story,
It is what I say,
That's what I'll do.
I am for you my love,
Thou art my attention,
Thou are my poetry.
©Uchenna Ozoekwe
aka Bethany Blaze.
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Comments
raj
Tue, 2018-07-31 14:54
Hi Mike
the tribulations of being in love very well expressed in these verses...a rarely used word denouement fits well here...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
Mikeozams
Tue, 2018-07-31 14:58
Thanks
Thanks man especially for the emphasis.
lovedly
Tue, 2018-07-31 15:09
very few I know compose three lines poetry another composes cinq
cinquins ---- 5 liners extraordinary
we must all be creative
that's why I started
FREESTYLE
Since years fifty
'''I am for you my love,
Thou art my attention,
Thou are my poetry.'''''....... superbly excellent how lucky she is
Mikeozams
Tue, 2018-07-31 21:45
Thanks
I guess you are right. I will tweak it to be 'thoughts through emotions, emotions fulfilled in actions' It's actually my motivation behind the lines.
I appreciate your input.
Mikeozams
Wed, 2018-08-01 19:30
Thanks
Aww. Thanks a lot. I appreciate.
chevyvent
Tue, 2018-07-31 22:02
Extremely good words you have inked.
Made you really think especially 3rd stanza "It unfurls me,
the curls and turns in my soul,
soul bespeaks as the heart exhales."
I want to read more of your writings the whole concept of this piece in my opinion centers on the love of emotions.
Extremely good words you have inked.
Mario Vitale
Mikeozams
Wed, 2018-08-01 19:29
Thanks a lot Mario. I
Thanks a lot Mario. I appreciate your kind words. Weirdelf has been a great mentor too.