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believe
Member since July 31, 2009
Member for 16 years, 10 months
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Has anyone noticed?
As anyone noticed lately ‘
How time is speeding up?
An old friend of mine says
it’s the detrition of the time continuum’ ?
I got up one day last week
made breakfast
Had a shower
got dressed
Just in time to see the sun set!.
When I was young
I remember one day
it was the school holidays, June
I went in the woods, to play,
That day lasted three n’ a half weeks!
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Whew’
I was glad to get to bed that day.
Now with all the uncertainty in life,
days and nights fly by
I have some crazy dreams!
I sometimes dream that Im a chicken
with a razor knife taped to my throat,
all my Starving friends and associates just walk by
nod ‘ and say good day,
but for some reason,
I feel so insecure!
Id feel suspicious!
If I had time!
But lately
I found a solution
I play my old videos
On slow action
Im just up to my wedding day!
Thursdays I stop!
And quickly head down to
Draw my aged pension.
Don’t young people move
So slowly!!!
believe’s timeline
- July 2024
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30 TueAnniversary
15 years of membership
- July 2019
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30 TueAnniversary
10 years of membership
- July 2014
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30 WedAnniversary
5 years of membership
- June 2013
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16 SunReceived a critique
on Has anyone noticed? from @Ian.T
"Just attention seeking ?? The write was good. It is that faraway drift we have sometimes in age when we drift off to sleep and miss parts of the day. Today was bad I was up at 7am the morning condensed into a few moment…" -
16 SunReceived a critique
on Has anyone noticed? from @loved
".....I got up one day last week made breakfast Had a shower got dressed Just in time to see .......the sun set!. as one ages one tends to slow" -
16 SunReceived a critique
on Has anyone noticed? from @Geezer
"As old age creeps up on us, everything else goes faster and faster! I can hardly grasp what the commercials on T.V. are all about before they are on to the next one! Before too long, I'll be so far behind, I'll be able…" -
16 SunReceived a critique
on Has anyone noticed? from @Rula
"not so sure about the ending and I believe some punctuation is needed here and there but all in all I've really enjoyed." -
16 Sun
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29 FriReceived a critique
on Blackberry Time from @scribbler
"Seems that picking blackberries is the same worldwide lol. They are fully ripe here now. You need to check your poem for typos which distract from how lovely it is...................stan" -
29 FriReceived a critique
on Blackberry Time from @Roscoe Lane
"Beautiful are the memories of washing faces in rivers after the feast, fingers that were surely died forever. Unfortunately the fingers clean up, along with the child. But for now i can relive it all again in your poem…" -
29 Fri
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26 TueReceived a critique
on The Angels Book from @judyanne
"title needs an apostrophe – angel’s and quite a few careless typos 'From St Peters favored kiss’ – favoured 'Hmmm; Would a mischief be a sin?’ I don’t think ‘would’ should be capitalised ‘Surely he would see smile’ - do…" -
12 TueReceived a critique
on walking alone from @PRECIOUSLYSET1
"I actually was rocking my 2 yr old to sleep for nap when I read this and ended up reading it to him as he fell asleep but in a slow, sing-song style that I think for my reading lightened the mood i really enjoyed this…" -
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07 ThuCritiqued
"curtain call" by @judyanne
"I like the way this is detailed and precise, ALL the makings for a life in Life or on stage I Like" -
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04 MonCritiqued
"OIL PAINTING" by @Nordic cloud
"I am an Oil Painter ; and this poem is GREAT! I Love it, well formulated and the poem flows beautifully ! Very well done, www. raymacart.com.au" -
04 MonCritiqued
"Love Is Painful" by @Rett
"A funny look at desire , Love, Etc, nice little rhyming poem I had a laugh ...thanks ray" - May 2012
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30 WedCritiqued
"pathetic" by @weirdelf
"Im a little confused, is the point of it to say "you will sin" without respecting faith, or "religious accusers" ? dont think the "f " word helped me much," -
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19 SatCritiqued
"The Superior Moment (Prose Revision)" by @Eduardo Cruz
"I Like the idea, but the first stanza and the second one had me confused, as they seemed to conflict meaning, but then I understand what was intended, by the word "Superior" on the 2nd stanz- So i think I got it, This c…" -
19 SatCritiqued
"Packing Prayer" by @faerybeki
"MMM This spells commitment to me, I like the the analogy description of having to re-sort ones life to accommodate, and let go other things from the past . Nice one !" -
19 SatCritiqued
"Vulnerabaiku" by @weirdelf
"Im learning slowly weirdelf , Like the end .,...."bespeaks my sanity"" -
19 SatCritiqued
"A SEED" by @mantiscepter
"I like the content of this, it take one on a trip through life, loneliness, and most emotions, Well done" -
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03 ThuNew follower
@Dalton
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- July 2010
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30 FriAnniversary
One year of membership
- August 2009
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15 SatHighest posting month
August 2009 — 7 poems
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02 SunFirst critique offered
on "Dance of the Deadwood Trees" by @Sin
- July 2009
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31 FriFirst publication
Forsaken
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30 ThuJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
Artist (painter)
Inventor
song writer
musician "minor "
bad poet
Location: sydney,Australia, AUS
Recent Work
Has anyone noticed?
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Blackberry Time
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walking alone
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Tears of Regret
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Winter
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My River of Life
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Abbots Forge
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The Death of an Aussie farmer
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Forsaken
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