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Lady of the Lake, Lady of my Dream,

The moon paints the water
with silver thread,
And midnight is gone ,
gone and put to bed

All memories of the day are foggy,
So far far away,
I wonder, if they ever
were at all.

A mist is falling
from the silver moon,
it gathers ghostly at my feet,
and the Dream that haunts my revelry
runs on this sweet sweet scene.

Why do you come to me,
My lady ,
No creature on earth could keep
Such a vision in the real world,

do the waters keep your ghost,
from a tragedy far ago,
yet you meet me every night
in my dream,

now I must sleep most of the day
just to touch your face,

and dream of an afterlife
that I may meet you there,
For the reason that you haunt me
Heaven only knows,
could the sadness in your eyes
hides the secret that you hold,

Did he leave you long ago
were you cried to the moon,
this hopeless love has my soul ,
to leave you forever empty ,

like the moon on the lake
that fades at dawn,
you took your love to heaven ,
now my angel of the waters ,
My lady of the lake.

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Not sure if this is a dream of yours that brings to you that Lady of the lake.
Something you are looking for but it always seems to be out of reach.
Maybe to make this piece and changed into a positive, better to be with the Lady than stand back waiting, this probably means that you need to go find that sanctuary.
Stand with the lady and see clearly that you need to be doing something other than sit and dream..
Great write and the rhyme could be more positive but not necessary as the whole reads OK, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Not sure if you understand the poem Ian.
the Lady is dead LONG ago, she waited for her lover, who never came so she drowned her self, and now in modern day, he is haunted by her and thinks he is in love,
but he can only see her in dream, it is SAD' and can not be made positive as she is a ghost and he is alive.
"well that was the thoughts behind the poem anyway." its a bit of a haunting poem! hope some "Get It"
sorry if you were confused
Thanks for comment Ian

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I think the title would be better as "My Lady Of the Lake", but it is your choice. I love the concept you have captured here.

A mist is falling
from the silver moon,
it gathers ghostly at my feet,
and the Dream that haunts my revelry
runs on this sweet sweet scene.

Why do you meet me in a Dream,
My lady of the lake ,
No creature on earth could keep
Such a vision in the real world,

excellent expression!

always, Cat

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That sounds ok.
I always worry when the title has to be extended to explain the poem.

so IF "My Lady of the Lake" is representable of the read, then its OK by me'
it actually was called Lady of the Lake, before I messed with it.

Im not used to writing none rhyming poems, but the first 2 lines Id wrote for one of my songs, and I liked them so much I made a poem...I think?
Thanks Candlewitch

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Yes I think I understood that the lady was of the other world it was that there was a one sided talk with her.

Why do you meet me in a Dream,
My lady of the lake ,
No creature on earth could keep
Such a vision in the real world,

do the waters keep your ghost,
from a tragedy far ago,
yet you meet me every night
in my dream,

Let the lady speak it would have made a love story that held forever, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Not sure how Id do that? Iv never read a poem with two people talking, wouldnt now how to do it?

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There are several of my poems that are a talk between two persons one is usually a Spirit guide or entity and me according to where they have taken me when I write with them. I will try and find one of mine that is a talk like that.meanwhile keep writing I enjoy your words, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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