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Blackberry Time

As the summer takes its will,
and foliage breaks its flush,

our dust edges come alive
thinning from there summer bloom
as black eyes seek the sun,

while cunning beaks take free feeds,
crown’s of thorns are no deterrent
as eagerly they seek the fruit,

Its now with bucket Grannies come,
charged with equal season life
to fill their Pails,

while prying eyes await ,
to take what’s left behind,

but a grandchild wont miss any strays,
as nectar bleed on a stick face

soap and towels at home await.

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Beautiful are the memories of washing faces in rivers after the feast, fingers that were surely died forever. Unfortunately the fingers clean up, along with the child. But for now i can relive it all again in your poem. gloriously lovely poem. Regards Roscoe..

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Thanks Roscoe

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Seems that picking blackberries is the same worldwide lol. They are fully ripe here now. You need to check your poem for typos which distract from how lovely it is...................stan

Thanks Scribbler, sorry about any mistakes, Im terrible for spell mistakes!

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