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Renga 18 (Rain/Raindrops)

Status: 
Program description/goal: 

Description: Modern Day Renga Poetry

Leader: Barbara Writes
Moderator(s): raj

Objectives: To bring Neopoets together to sharpen their poetic skill, share their poems, and critique Poetry of others. It is a place to interact and co-write Poetry together.

Level of expertise: Open to all

Subject matter: Renga Theme: Rain/Raindrops is to be written in Japanese format. Haiku 5/7/5, senyru 5/7/5, tanka 5/7/5/7/7 and Renga (Eternal string of tanka)

Length: 
30 days
Number of participants (limit): 
100 people
Date: 
Friday, June 1, 2018 to Saturday, June 30, 2018

Comments

Each droplet of rain
a mercenary of life
god sends from the skies

we hear them knock on roof tops
waking us to join rain dance
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raj (sublime_ocean)

how do you join, are there instructions about the forms or must research them yourself?

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

tyro the form you have to use here is Tanka of 5 lines conforming to sequence of syllabi 5/7/5/7/7 to the theme of raindrops/rain. Barbara would then consolidate such tankas posted to form a Renga
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I couldn’t have said it so precise being as detail as I can get sometimes. Lol

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

Nice to meet. You join by commenting here and asking. I just add you

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

Not sure if this qualifies

Tears of heaven
quench the thirst of the earth,
plants and animals.

the rebirth of the dead land
celebration of life

Alid

wonderful to see you back....loved your Tanka...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Great poem but your syllables count is off
5/7/5/7/7
You are in

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

can you point out where cos I can't find it.

Alid

Alid, if i may step in

quench the thirst of the earth [six syllabi],

celebration of life [six syllabi]

I am sure you can fix both
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raj (sublime_ocean)

quench the thirst of the earth [six syllabi], could be turned to
quench the thirst of mother earth [seven syllabi],

celebration of life {six syllabi] could be turned to
true celebration of life [seven syllabi]
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Hello Barbara

do you post your poem here, or in the stream?

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

Post your poem here

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

this poetry form is new to me. Glad it was introduced, I know that it consist of two stanzas and multiple writers. What if you don't have anyone to collab with?

You are here collabing now. That’s what this workshop is all about. Just share your haiku or senyru here with two couplet added and you have a tanka.

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

Love fall from heaven
dark skies rain clouds are forming
silvery droplets

body cries out for comfort
from a stream boiling inside.

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

sometimes as drizzle
at times in heavy torrent
drops of rain perform

the stage suddenly lights up
to announce upcoming act
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Just a tad syllables count 5/7/4/8/6 correction 5/7/5/7/7

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

thanks Barbara for the catch. I have now conformed to 5/7/5/7/7.
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Sun heats the waters
Mist is freed of gravity
The clouds puff out full

Butterfly exits cocoon
As clear drops fall on my head.

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

Welcome tyro to the Renga with your vivid tanka...

"as clear drops fall on my head" create a picture that you are enjoying the rain without an umbrella
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raj (sublime_ocean)

kids get excited
to sail paper boats on streams
to voyage their dreams

some are of the warrior
Napoleon Bonaparte
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I really like this little nugget. It’s not about rain or raindrops but kids sailing paper boats on streams works for me

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

grey clouds bear rain drops
form rainbow against sunlight
to brush them on soil

soon a painting emerges
so very pleasing to eyes
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Nice one

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

kids splash in puddles
adults walk in umbrellas
two talking pictures

first iconic of delight
other of missing the bus
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Misted by the sun
Cooled and mixed in with the dust
Drops to thirsty earth.

Children splash in the puddles
This is life itself to all.

Ian..

.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Add two more lines, a couplet with 7 syllables each and your haiku will become a Tanka.

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

Hope this is what you need for the Tanka, have a lovely day out there, Yours as always Ian..xx

.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

I think the second line in the 3 line haiku needs to more syllables. I count five. I maybe off tho being American dialect. lol.

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

Im not sure cooled and mixed are two syllables. Would you share the dictionary. I’ve realized dialect are different.

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

I must have used a bad counter so now corrected the problem, Thanks for all you do,
Take care and my love to all,
Yours as always Ian. x

.
Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

drenched from head to toe
kids return home in delight
because schools are closed

sun smiles again from the sky
to watch children play football
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Do I follow on from raj's

sun smiles again from the sky
to watch children play football

?

cheers,
Jess
Everything changes except Neopoet's 'Prime Directive'-
"Critique don't comment".
https://www.neopoet.com/community-guidelines

it doesn't necessarily have to connect with the previous Tanka... you post your tanka and Barbara latr connects all tankas posted here like links of a chain....in a separate link
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raj (sublime_ocean)

raj

cheers,
Jess
Everything changes except Neopoet's 'Prime Directive'-
"Critique don't comment".
https://www.neopoet.com/community-guidelines

why is rain biased
about when and where to fall
rather than bless all

flooding some with her riches
not reaching those famine lands

raj (sublime_ocean)

sweeping all rubbish
that is littered everywhere
cleansing air as well

if ever she is enraged
wrecks a havoc in her path
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raj (sublime_ocean)

You can write a whole Tanka. Or as you did a couplet to raj haiku creating a Tanka. Collaboration at its best. I’ve allowed changes as they make the workshop more creative and inspiring. Not rigid or strict to form. Except for 5/7/5/7/7 is the only for Japanese. I am expanding to other forms as raj is saying but haven’t yet. It’s time now to do so. ready to create it with other poetry forms that is still collaborative in native. .

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment

If I’ve left out anybody’s ready to go Tanka let me know so I can correct it. Sparrow alidzain and heartfelt are ones I see haven’t been linked to renga. . Let me know how I can help get you there. Happy rengas are happy poets

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop*
Amqerican Version of Japanese Poetry
~American Renga~
Free Verse, Western, Modern, etc
~ Renga ~
Haiku, Senyru, Tanka, Renga
All Neopoets are welcome to join the Collaborative Poetry Writing fun.

author comment
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