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The Yellow Rose of Friendship
This yellow rose of friendship
a tie between two friends
Someone to give me a hug
When life seems at an end
Someone who understands
all my hopes and fears
Someone who is there
and wipes away my tears
Someone who knows
of my sad loss
Of my best friend
so far away has gone
someone who knows
Why I am so forlorn
Someone who has seen
my ocean of tears
Thank you is not enough
For you. my friend
You're here
Last few words:
This was in four verses
It was not intended to rhyme
Here is the result.
Blue
Lost so many souls now it is hare to move on.
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Sun, 2021-06-13 12:22
A fitting...
thank you to a great friend! Nothing to crit.~ Geez.
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Triskelion
Sun, 2021-06-13 15:00
Loss
is a hard thing to endure. Doing it alone can be dangerous. Even one good friend will ease the sorrow we feel when one is lost. I never managed to find another true friend after the loss of my own many years ago. Of course, we lose people and get support from others around us in sympathy, but sometimes, we bear the true loss ourselves.
A yellow rose is a good place to start.
"Your" should be "You're" ie, "you are"
Thomas
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...so like my lost dreams...the flood
Ray Whitaker
Mon, 2021-06-14 18:03
Realy nice piece..
Love the ending, as a stand alone line
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