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worries
I used to worry that our hearts would slip away from each other
Everytime I couldn’t feel the touch of your hand
I used to worry that I would never see you again
Everytime I had to wave you goodbye
I used to worry that you would finally let yourself fall into my heart
And not like what you saw
I used to worry that if your hands did not reach towards me
No one else’s ever would
And suddenly these worries were more present than you
And my worries became more comforting than your embrace
And eventually,
I stopped worrying
I let go of the worries, but you were not waiting for me behind them
I let you go
Maybe even pushed you away
But now, I remember my worries more than i remember you
I can recall you slipping away more than I can recall you trying to stay
And I am not sad
To have let you go
I am sad
To never have held you
Without being scared I’d hold you back,
Without ever being held
Only ever held back
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Thu, 2023-06-22 07:12
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Thank you for sharing your poem "worries". Your poem captures the feeling of anxiety and uncertainty that comes with being in a relationship. The repetition of "I used to worry" creates a sense of urgency and emphasizes the speaker's fear of losing their partner. The line "And my worries became more comforting than your embrace" is particularly powerful as it shows how the speaker's anxiety has taken over their thoughts and emotions.
One suggestion for improvement would be to add more sensory details to the poem. For example, you could describe the touch of your partner's hand or the sound of their voice. This would help to create a more vivid image in the reader's mind and make the emotions in the poem more tangible.
Overall, your poem effectively conveys the complex emotions that come with letting go of a relationship. Keep writing and exploring these themes in your work.
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