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The Wind (Stan's WS)

It travels across the seas,
the mountains and the trees,
passing through villages
and great modern cities

Its gentle touch
is like a lover's caress,
soothing and comforting
a troubled soul laid to rest

It makes me grateful
on a hot, summer's day,
when the heat is intense,
making me sweat all day

When it is erratic and violent
it's a force to be feared
as it devastated the cities,
inflicting a million hurts

While mortals remain helpless,
caught in its blind rage,
forced to pick up the pieces
of a life that has gone to waste

Such is the nature of the wind..
When it is graceful, it's lovely
When it is violent, it is madness,
it is cruelty

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A good choice. A theme that can make use of good deal of imagery and I think you did well in that.
The line "inflicting a million hurts"...is not clear. Do you mean "hearts"?

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First of all, thank you for the visit and the comment. What I wanted to say is inflicting a lot of pain on many people but I don't really know how to say it without disrupting the rhyme too much err any ideas?

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