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She silently sleeps besides me
in fear of my not waking up
so she continues to keep awake
till I snore


in the morning hours
continues to sleep
when I don't snore

am I alive she wonders
doc hath said
heart attack
has he gone

then I wake up and clap
Ah a hot cup of tea
she doesn't smile

gosh you are living
holds her breath
for a longer while

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Daily routine Is it love or fear tell me anyone Ere it's time up.MY NEW FORMAT RW INSPIRED
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Not Explicit Content


Hello, Lovedly,
Very sensitive poetry - tender, but direct. If I read your last few words correctly, you ask if it is love or fear. As we are only human, maybe both? You offer much to think about here, Lovedly. (Is this Eastern structure, as listed? Intriguing form.)
Thank you,

Western I did a few
Eastern I don't know
My eye's limitation half blind
the darkened snowy cold night minus16 that night...
at night dimmed lamplight
she sleeps while I type..

This is not really a reality
but I visit somebody
they both smile at me
Lav you may also
do if you wish so
lemme know

(have you realised
a bit of my new syle...
format RW inspired)

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Yes, I find myself listening in the dark, waking several times through the night, [I sleep badly because of medical issues].
My wife, who sleeps in another room and has heart problems, wakes me as she passes to the bathroom and in the morning, when I can see the light in the kitchen through the cracks in my bedroom door; I feel relieved and can open the door without fear. A very well thought out piece. Nicest I've seen from you in a while. ~ Geez.

It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

your perception is inspirational
so i live still

They say isolation ...loneliness ...are the worst forms of solitude

so what to do

just LIVE with glee
thanks to thee
feel free

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