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Where Summer and Winter Meet
The golden sun descends on silver frost,
two bleeding seasons dance upon the line.
Where burning summer heat is paid and lost,
the icy breath of darkness makes them twine.
A trembling bloom of fire, pure and white,
descends to meet the landscape down below.
Her burning touch ignites the freezing night,
to kiss the pale domain of falling snow.
Though destiny decrees they must depart,
an endless love is burned into their mind,
and tears their fleeting, earthly lives apart,
they leave a living legacy behind.
The ancient skies record their endless sign,
a timeless bond that mortal years defy.
No passing clock can shake their vow divine,
they break each spring to live beneath the sky.
Deep in the woods where roots of shadows sleep,
the ancient trees hold fast this holy ground.
Where mossy stones and frozen rivers weep,
their breathless, endless tragedy is bound.
The golden leaves of autumn never fall,
they hang locked tight within a cage of ice.
The forest stands to guard them through it all,
a dark and wild, eternal paradise.
Where amber leaves and crystal branches meet,
the canopy ignites in copper sparks.
The pale white frost surrenders to the heat,
while shadows dance across the frozen barks.
A sudden flash of emerald and gold,
melts down the barriers of ice and stone.
The warmest light and deepest winter cold,
blend into hues no mortal eye has known.
Her sun-warmed skin collides with numbing chill,
a sharp and stinging shock of raw desire.
His frozen pulse begins to race and fill,
as icy veins ignite with liquid fire.
They press together, shivering and bright,
steam rises as their touching fingers glow.
A blinding spark of summer in the night,
the deepest crimson bleeding through the snow.
Locked fast within each other's fierce embrace,
they freeze the instant, capturing the flame.
No passing age can ruin or erase,
the silent woodland temple to their name.
The cycle halts, the wheel of time stands still,
a monument where fire and ice compete.
Upon the crest of this immortal hill,
is where the summer and the winter meet.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Dedicated to my Wife Susanna
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Critiques
neopoet
1 day 20 hours ago
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patrickgadoury
1 day 7 hours ago
That time of the year! Bravo
I just finished writing a seasonally themed northern poetry anthology, so obviously you’re preaching to the choir with this kind of piece. There’s a lot here I admire.
If I can offer any useful insight, it’s that, IMO, this may be about a quarter too long. I don’t mean any one line screams filler, or I’d point to it directly like I normally do. It’s more that the poem sometimes retreads its own strongest idea: summer/winter, fire/ice, eternal love, frozen flame. Some strategic cuts could make this a powerhouse without losing the heart of it. The craft is there. I’d just trust the best images to do more damage.
Ray Bear
1 day 4 hours ago
Thank you
Thank you so much! I really appreciate you taking the time to read it, especially fresh off finishing your own northern anthology , congrats on that, by the way, sounds like an incredible project. I really appreciate your thoughtful input. Regards Ray
Trouble
5 hours 26 min ago
Summer and winter
I must say that the title caught me so I had to read it.
I love the metaphors of the summer and winter it was very smooth to read
Good job