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What we call government

Bunch of old fools,
Dining on dreams to come
You see.

Is this government?
Union of pregnant men,
Old fools, this country's hope they've swallowed.

We would have been better than this
If not that you don't want to die,
Me either.

No light, No job, No food
A government of Agbada and Dansiki, mchew, hunchback government.

Under trees for education
Potholes you call roads
Death traps for medicals.

We prefer to fold our hands and watch,
You don't know,
If your brother dies today
Tomorrow might be your turn.

What we call government
Is a jest
A bunch of cumbags

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you write of an outdated and ineffectual system of government. this poem is quite compelling and stirs the reader's blood. things are tough all over and knowing that you are in dire straights, makes me sad. keep on writing, maybe some good will come from it. good luck.

*hugs, Cat

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if you keep writing and telling the young men these stories, it will make a difference! I will keep you in my thoughts and hope for a better Nigeria. ~ Geez.
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