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What Tomorrow Brings
One step forward, no step back
Unimagined from the uncharted track
To heal, to hope, find peace in me
And breathe, and soar, and finally dream
I’m my own voice, I won’t be silenced
Break free from troubling wails of violence
Forgotten pasts that linger, shadow
Resurfaced warnings that encompass tomorrow
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Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2022-10-20 07:25
I’m very impressed
I like the subject matter and language choices you make in this and your other poems. There is a consistency that makes it easy for a reader to “see” your perspective on the world. Just like the great painters in a sense. If you see a Van Gogh, you know it’s him, same with Monet. Both impressionists but impossible to confuse one with the other. Your writing has a feel to it that I like. It’s very classic.
Well done,
Tim
Flower Girl
Thu, 2022-10-20 20:28
Thank you!
Thanks Tim,
This means a lot! Since starting writing poetry back in March, earlier this year, I feel that I have really been able to find my own style and expression which was yet undiscovered up to then. I have now written over 70 poems, all varying in style and length, but remaining possessive of my unique experiences and purpose.
For the first time this year, I even entered into my school's Literary Festival for Poetry and Song Style categories, as well as the Poetry Slam which took place the Monday just passed. For both the Poetry and Song Style, I am a finalist for and am thrilled to have been considered. Unfortunately, they forgot to organise judges for the Slam but I'm just glad to have taken a chance to be involved and try something new.
Thank you again for your kind and thoughtful words about this piece and my writing in general!
- Bri :)
author commentGeezer
Thu, 2022-10-20 08:57
As a rhymer...
this appeals to me on two levels, one is that you use near-rhyme with impunity and elan
the other is that you manage to keep a near perfect pace and rhythm.
This is very good stuff! ~ Geezer.
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Flower Girl
Thu, 2022-10-20 20:38
Yes
Thank you for your comment!
I don't actually often use a rhyming scheme but sometimes it just feels right to, which was the case for this piece. Also, for me, due to my music and rhythmic knowledge and experience, the flow just sort of just comes to me naturally with the words.
- Bri :)
author commentJackweb
Fri, 2022-10-21 03:15
Nice Piece !
My intuition tells me that subsequent stanzas maybe added in the future. Base on the theme your poem have, it still have more things to tell.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".
~Jackweb
RoseBlack
Sat, 2022-10-22 10:05
One step forward
I love the first line! It speaks to your strength and determination and the ability to overcome the obstacles you are facing. Your flow and use of rhyme made for a smoothe read..I look forward to seeing where your journey takes you.
~RoseBlack~