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Transcending Space

Transient thoughts
Seek higher plains
Where reality cannot abide
And bids me follow

Perhaps it leads
To a realm spun from dreams
There is no pain
There are no needs
Asleep in the arms of time
And time does stand still

Transcending space to find
What had been forgotten
Or lost

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Great title! It fits the piece well. Your language usage is excellent, as usual. And composition fine. Each line flowed nicely and logically into the next. Your subject matter entrances me. I liked these lines best:

a realm spun from dreams
There is no pain
There are no needs
Asleep in the arms of time
And time does stand still

Transcending space to find
What had been forgotten
Or lost

a bet pensive. I like!

always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

Thank you so much. Guess people either don't care or don't realize I am back

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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When near asleep and daydreaming
thoughts grow random nearly streamimg
into realms which might have been
and that elusive time called when
..........but I like yours better............stan

Thanks yours is good as well but it is not my voice but yours
however the same thought was expressed. Isn't that the best part of writing
Chrys

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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I think it is that people don't know you are back. You'll have to let them know.
I missed your voice here.

btw: I've sent you something!

Love, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

Think I'll let them find out on their own and choose whether they want to follow my work or not.

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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