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The Titanic
A Tear Drop In The Ocean
Reflects No Shown Emotion
Water With No Mercy
In A Frozen Desert
A Land Without A Shore
A Cry To Be Ignored
Eleven Stories Tall
To An Iceberg
She Would Fall
A Disaster At Sea
It's History To Me
The Atlantic,
Deep Cold And Starved
The Titanic
The Maiden To Be Scarred
The Captain Of This Slaughter
The Party On Board
Knew Not The Angry Waters
To Take More Than They Could Afford
The Unsinkable Queen
On This Voyage Her First
Now Lies Deceased
The Ocean , Its Thirst......
Written By Steven R. Adamski 1982
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scribbler
Sun, 2018-09-30 15:24
Greetings
And welcome to the asylum lol. If you have problems navigating feel free to ask me or any other member. I will at least be able to point you to somebody who Can help if i can't.
Taking on a poem about such a well known and well worn subject as the Titanic is a daunting thing. But this poem works pretty well and the personification of the north Atlantic as a hungry entity is a good one. But I do wonder about capitalizing each word. Is that just something you always do ? Or maybe I'm missing the reason for doing so in this particular poem? But nevertheless I enjoyed the read...........stan
I'm The Poet Dude
Mon, 2018-10-01 23:30
The Titanic
Thank You For Welcoming Me To The Asylum , This Poem Is Number Three In A Four Part Story(Although It Was Written First) I Will Show You A Ship Builders Dream Next. When I Hand Write My Work I Always Capitalize Each Word , I Think It Looks Better ,I Guess. Thanks Again........Stever
author commentShadowdancer3349
Mon, 2018-10-01 01:14
Dude
I would suggest a change of title other than that I enjoyed your writing Welcome to Neo Poet it is a place you will enjoy