The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Thought Intention" explores the theme of living a double life and the desire for success while also maintaining noble ideals. The poem has a clear structure and uses rhyme to create a rhythmic flow. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be strengthened.

First, consider revisiting the use of clichés and common phrases. Lines such as "Bringing all of my loved ones slowly to tears" and "I have given my all my soul and tried my very best" feel somewhat predictable and lack originality. Try to find fresh and unique language to express your ideas.

Additionally, the poem could benefit from more specific and concrete imagery. Rather than using abstract language like "inner conflicts" and "real self," try to paint a vivid picture that engages the reader's senses and emotions. This will make your message more relatable and impactful.

Lastly, be mindful of the consistency of your metaphors. The poem begins with the idea of living double lives, but then transitions

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Hello, Alan,
Candid poem. Being aware of, and facing our fears is a true awakening and major step toward happiness. So much interrupts/changes our destiny and tries to control us. The poem lends much to think about. Great final stanza. Nice rhyme pattern throughout.
Thank you!
L

I went to your profile after reading this poem.. because it has a strong beat, and I wanted to see who you are. So I can see how this poem could be performed/read to an audience, and the skill of your (sometimes uneven?) rhythm is lovely. I am not a great fan of rhyming lines, but of course this works here.