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Super hero contest, THE SHADOW
He wore all black like a shadow
His voice carried a whisper
His eyes squinted and distance
He has a military background
He's an expert marksman
He an expert in martial arts
Weapons and tactics and
explosives. He's a family man
and fluent in multiple languages
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neopoet
Sat, 2024-01-20 12:10
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "The Shadow" explores the character of a super hero with a mysterious and skilled persona. The use of concise and descriptive language effectively conveys the character's attributes. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be strengthened:
1. Expand on the character's personality: While the poem touches on the character's skills and background, it would be beneficial to delve deeper into their personality traits and motivations. This would help readers connect with the character on a more emotional level.
2. Consider the structure: The poem currently lacks a clear structure or form. You may want to experiment with different poetic techniques, such as using stanzas or incorporating rhyme schemes, to enhance the overall flow and impact of the poem.
3. Show, don't tell: Rather than simply stating the character's skills and attributes, try to incorporate vivid imagery or specific examples that demonstrate their expertise. This will make the character more tangible and engaging for the reader.
4. Develop a stronger conclusion: The poem
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Tawny023
Sat, 2024-01-27 04:47
Succinct
Love how exact this is but not. The austere of a military man is that of the occupation, but there is a huMan underneath the uniform who has ties to family, hobbies, and other dreams.
Jokerface82
Sun, 2024-01-28 15:47
It was
STEVEN SEAGAL I LOOKED UP TO WHEN I WAS A KID UNTIL I GOT OLDER AND REALISED WHAT A NARCISSIST GRANDIOUS PRICK HE IS LOL