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Sunku

Submitted by Sparrow on Tue, 2018-02-27 04:24

Seek out
A new way
Sunku today.

Feelings
Stretch the mind.
Love a new find.

Explore
Reach out now
For more like minds

Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Review Request (Direction): 
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
This beat the transfer list.. It was a comment, but now a statement which has become a Sunku..
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Workshop: 
Sunku: beyond rhyme and rhythm, search for new structures in short form

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Geezer

Tue, 2018-02-27 08:35

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I liked the praise for the new form and see that you have mastered it. Nice work. ~ Gee.
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Sparrow

Tue, 2018-02-27 19:34

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Thanks very much for your welcome comment, I think we need to have a rest and bring out Killer, Nevermore, and Digit for another meeting!!
Take care young one and thanks again,
Yours Ian..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

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